Template:Did you know nominations/Maggie Tokuda-Hall

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The result was: promoted by Cielquiparle (talk) 08:27, 29 August 2023 (UTC)

Maggie Tokuda-Hall

Created by Significa liberdade (talk). Self-nominated at 16:47, 26 June 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Maggie Tokuda-Hall; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: None required.

Overall: I'm changing the check mark here to a question mark, after consultation with Theleekycauldron, because I'm still learning how to review. (1) The DYK reviewing template requires an inline cite for each paragraph. The four paragraphs which summarise each of the four books lack cites. The cites could be easily supplied by referring to each book in turn, as the cite for the opening summary. This is the only part of these comments that need to be done to make it ready for DYK, in my opinion. (2) I like the hook, but I wonder if adding the name of the book at the end of the hook would be useful? The title gives a bit more context to the nature of the book, and the contrast between finding love and the racism issue puts the matter in even stronger perspective, in my opinion. Adding the name of the book would still keep it under 200 characters, by my count. Just a suggestion. Remaining comments are to help improve the article, but not strictly needed for the article and hook for DYK. (3) In the discussion around Scholastic's response, the article says that as of May 2023 Tokuda-Hall had not responded to Scholastic. That's correct, according to the cite, but that cite appears to be outdated. In her blog, Tokuda-Hall recounts meeting with Scholastic and deciding not to accept their proposals: https://www.prettyokmaggie.com/blog, Love in the Library, May 8, 2023. That passage in the article should be updated. (4) Note 2 (referring to note numbers as of today) supports the statement in the article that she lives with her husband and her "children". That's what the source says, but in her blog, Tokuda-Hall just refers to her husband and son. I would suggest using the blog and referring to one son, not children as in the cited source. (5) Note 3 has a typo: lists the author of the cited source as "Yu, Brandon Yu". Should be "Yu, Brandon", or "Brandon Yu". (6) Note 5 is supposed to be a link to an article about Monty Hall, but actually just repeats to a different source, same source as in Note 4. (7) Under "Awards and Honours", bullet 4, there is no cite for Publisher's Weekly putting Love in the Library on their best picture book list. (8) Note 33 - links to 2022 list, but the text of the article indicates it should be 2020. (9) Note 34 - Kirkus Review - couldn't find "The Mermaid, etc." on the list. Mr Serjeant Buzfuz (talk) 23:34, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

  • Please feel free to re-review as I've completed the following tasks:
1) Added citations for the book summaries (self-citations to the books themselves)
2) ALT0: ... that Scholastic requested Maggie Tokuda-Hall remove the phrase "virulent racism" from the Author's Note in Love in the Library, a children's book about Japanese-American internment camps?
3) TH's meeting with Scholastic CEO:Updated
4) Citation disparity re: number of children: Fixed.
5) Reference typo: Fixed.
6) Wrong website for reference: Fixed.
7) Missing citation for PW: Fixed
8) Reference site wrong year: Fixed
9) The book is on the list. The list is ordered in alphabetical order by author's last name. I find the Kirkus Best Books lists take time to load. You sometimes have to scroll down to force it to load or click the "see more / refresh list" link.
Let me know if there's any other changes to be made. :) Significa liberdade (talk) 16:14, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Moved from WP:DYKNA, Significa liberdade; see the issues raised above. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 11:55, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Everything looks good to me, thanks. Is there anything further that I need to do? (this is only my second DYK review, so not sure of the protocols.) Mr Serjeant Buzfuz (talk) 17:01, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
  • I've updated the Sources to a Yes-check mark . Everything looks good; Hook ALT0 is good. Mr Serjeant Buzfuz (talk) 15:20, 7 August 2023 (UTC)
    • @Mr Serjeant Buzfuz: nice job on the review! In the future, it's best to leave the {{DYK checklist}} template as-is when you finish your initial review, even when the article changes – that way, promoters and admins can figure out what the issue was at a glance. Thanks! theleekycauldron (talkcontribs) (she/her) 16:53, 12 August 2023 (UTC)