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Per a request, I will overlook this article in a manner akin to a peer review--so my suggestions are just suggestions. Status: more TBA. DMT biscuit (talk) 17:33, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I found the use of "Widely credited" somewhat contentious. Not because the source doesn't support a similar claim, but, because of it's worded within: "it was Rampling’s Shoom that effectively kicked off the acid-house craze in London". The quote doesn't regard others views and so perhaps the lead sentence should be reworded to say "some consider" or provide attribution to Michaelangelo Matos.
Agree...Done Ceoil (talk) 18:05, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I also don't see why this and the following praise by Billboard are relegated to the lead. To me, they perfectly suit the legacy section--the event's legacy can be seen in the popularization of acid house.DMT biscuit (talk) 17:48, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Agree...Done Ceoil (talk) 18:05, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"in their 2015 list 25 Best of all time dance clubs" → "in their, 2015, list of the all-time best dance clubs".
Rewrote this. Ceoil (talk) 18:21, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, but my problem is that she is very low profile and I don't have her nee surname. But will see how it can be rephrased. Ceoil (talk) 17:55, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"finally to a larger again nightclub venue on Charing Cross Road." I found the use of again weird and clunky! Possible removal. DMT biscuit (talk) 13:05, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"The club's name was inspired by a phrase Rampling heard in Ibiza to describe the effects of coming-up, or "rushing", on ecstasy, the club drug that became widely associated with the UK dance music scene. Rampling says that the word came from a phrase he heard from Trevor Fung on their first visit the island." → "The club's name was inspired by a phrase DJ Trevor Fung told Rampling in Ibiza to describe the effects of coming-up, or "rushing", on ecstasy, the club drug that became widely associated with the UK dance music scene."DMT biscuit (talk) 07:48, 23 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Reworded Ceoil (talk) 00:52, 26 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Ceoil: Resumming comments: "Shoom's opening night in November 1988 was titled "Klub Sch-oom",[19] but this name was shortened to "Shoom" by the second night.[20][21]" I'm sceptical of this piece of info's inclusion. It seems to be trivial in nature—akin to a pub quiz question. DMT biscuit (talk) 15:15, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Not so sure as the club name was not random or because it sounded nice; it was rooted in E/LSD culture, and I think its good to hint at how the original phonetic "coming up" word, became the more nuanced magic mushroom (shroom) reference. Ceoil (talk) 21:51, 1 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
In the high energy link, do you mean [Hi-NRG]]? DMT biscuit (talk) 15:43, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"trying to find records that would make perfect sense on E" → "trying to find records that would make perfect sense on E [ecstasy]". DMT biscuit (talk) 15:43, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Considering this excerpt: "although Georgiou says he was not at first interested by the image" doesn't lead anywhere I'm sceptical of its inclusion. DMT biscuit (talk) 15:43, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Agree with all and implemented. Ceoil (talk) 20:36, 26 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
