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User:Aprilblanche25/Kaden_James[edit]

Aprilblanche25 (talk) 01:37, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Mitchell Way[edit]

Requesting feedback on my first article. Any recommendations you could provide would be greatly appreciated. Thanks so much for your help!

Carolleehilton (talk) 03:27, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Richard Seal Please review this page.[edit]

Please review this page on the distinguished English organist and conductor Dr. Richard Seal, former master of choristers at Salisbury Cathedral and creator of the first English cathedral girls' choir.

Winston Franklin (talk) 03:31, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks much better. I made a few improvements, like the right conducor category, wikilinks, clarifying he did not get a degree fom a building, etc. See the page. Thanks. W Nowicki (talk) 21:18, 25 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Kitellentertainment/Kilo kapanel[edit]

Kapanelli da boss 03:50, 22 July 2011 (UTC)

User:Nevshupa/Mechanically Stimulated Gas Emission[edit]

Need to know your opinion on this my first article

Nevshupa (talk) 09:33, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Gilbert Casey[edit]

I translated it from de:Gilbert Casey but mostly reverted back to the listed source from the German page. I used the Article Wizard, so I'm completing the process here.

Mark Hurd (talk) 12:53, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Timeport101/Verax NMS Rewritten article.[edit]

I'd like to ask for a feedback if it's suitable for moving from user space.

Timeport101 (talk) 13:10, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Does not appear to show notability. First one is just a personal web page that lists every such product. 2 is a blog entry that mentions it briefly. 3 is a promotional press release 4 is the product's own documentation 5 is a company written "white paper" 6 is more product documentation 7 is a blog entry that seems to be cut-n-paste of an ad for the product. I would say keep it in your user space until it gets any third-party coverage. W Nowicki (talk) 21:38, 25 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

International_College_Portsmouth[edit]

Please can you feedback on this page?

Paulj icp (talk) 14:39, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I would suggest merging it into University of Portsmouth. Not even sure what it is? Certainly British English makes sense, but to US readers, a "pathway" is a trail used for hiking and bicycles. So calling it a "pathway provider" sounds like it is a company that constructs such trails. Indeed, its website calls it a "Pathway provider" (with capital "P"?). But it seems it really is a division of the University for foreign students. What we would call a "Community college" in the US? We should not use euphemisms, but clarify what things really are. The only two sources are press releases from the parent University, so it has not been shown independently notable. W Nowicki (talk) 20:17, 25 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Kissin' Time (song)[edit]

I have a article about a song Kissin' Time that needs to be reviewed. Thanks
Zrinschchuck

Stanley 15:33, 22 July 2011 (UTC)

Four Orchestral Songs[edit]

It is not really long yet. I am planning to expand it as soon as I can.

Wildbill hitchcock (talk) 16:45, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Aegir Hosting System[edit]

I'd appreciate any feedback, as this is my first article

Socrates32 (talk) 17:59, 22 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, this does not seem to meet general notability requirements. The sources are just developers themselves, or an ad for one of their talks. It needs to be noticed by someone besides the developers, even if it is a useful technology. I would suggest moving it into Special:MyPage/Aegir Hosting System and waiting until it gets goverage some a third party, for example, some trade press or a book. It looks like it might be close, but the burden of proof is on you to provide an independent source. The article itself could a little context for the reader who is not into web jargon. I chuckle when I think someone might confuse Drupal for example with DruPaul, if this one does not say it is computer software, for example. W Nowicki (talk) 20:03, 25 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]