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User:Jherschel/Reg Campbell - New article[edit]

Feeback on article requested including style and referencing. Thanks

~~Jherschel (talk) 11:24, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nice article! :) Referencing is all in order, and you've added categories, which is good. A nice finishing touch would be an infobox, but I think you could publish the way it is and add that later if you so choose. Good work. :) Pianotech (talk) 11:43, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gadgetsmiss/LogiPen[edit]

I'm writing about a new company called LogiPen. I think their new product is noteworthy. Is this article OK? Please advise. Thanks.

~~Gadgetsmiss (talk) 11:31, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there! I read the article, and what I see is that the references you cite are from the company's website. That wouldn't hold up for establishing notability because they are not outside references. I see in your links section that you link to several outside companies. If they mention the pen, then that would establish notability. See WP:GNG for more information about general notability. And careful....while I didn't see anything overtly promotional, statements like "LogiPen is the only digital pen in the market supporting two handwriting recognition mechanisms to convert your handwriting to text" need to have references and citations to back them up. Good article though; I think if you clear up the referencing issue and go over the text with a careful eye making sure it's written in non-promotional tone, you would be able to publish it without issue. Good luck. :) Pianotech (talk) 11:54, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Snowglobe_(band)[edit]

Believe this page is ready to be live. Please move. Thank you.

~~Groundswell (talk) 16:44, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good to me! :) It's already in mainspace. I'll remove the userdraft tag for you. Best of luck, Pianotech (talk) 17:17, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I agree, but please consider adding more descriptive names to the references, like this: [http://www.apple.com|Apple official site]]. It's more useful to the reader than just a bare URL. Chevy monte carlo - alt 11:49, 5 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cotedelachevre/Alexander_Miller_(composer)[edit]

1. I disclose that Alexander Miller is my brother. Is he "notable" enough to include in wikipedia? 2. Are the web references sufficient under wikipedia guidelines? Thank you. ~~Cotedelachevre (talk) 16:52, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, you list several outside references, so I think you're ok that way. The article is a little short; don't be surprised if someone tags it as a 'stub.' That just means that it's a short article and is an invitation for editors to expand it. Good luck Pianotech (talk) 17:23, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Live Native[edit]

I have created a new article and would appreciate feedback from other editors. Many thanks!

--PressedBack (talk) 21:58, 4 July 2010 (UTC)--PressedBack (talk) 21:58, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

e.g. User:Example/Lipsum or Cats or http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Example/Lipsum[edit]

I would like to make this article completed and permanted so that it stays visible to other and not delated. Thanks

~~Sardars (talk) 23:00, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The article is here: Shahid Abdul Razaq

However, as the tags indicate, you haven't added any references, and Wikipedia is not allowing ne biographies without references. You have an external link in the section called references, but an external link is not a reference, and I didn't see Shahid Abdul Razaq mention in it, so it can't even be fixed into a reference.--SPhilbrick T 00:10, 6 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]