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Verneukpan

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know where to improve it. Any comment is welcome. This is quite an important South African topic, so I would appreciate any comments.

Thanks, LouriePieterse 08:43, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Redtigerxyz

• The lead does not contain all the facets of the salt pan like Landspeed. Expand lead as summary of article

 Done Improved lead to the correct standard. LouriePieterse 09:17, 17 October 2009 (UTC)

• Image of salt-pan needed

 Done Found two images and added both to article. LouriePieterse 07:51, 27 July 2009 (UTC)

• Sir Malcolm Campbell's response in his first interview. Which one? fact?

 Done Referenced fact. LouriePieterse 10:51, 18 July 2009 (UTC)

• I see nothing about the geological importance of the salt pan. Its history and formation is not discussed. "The surface is completely flat, claimed to be a dried up lake estimated 57 km long and 11 km wide." when?

 Done Added information about the location and size of the pan. LouriePieterse 15:35, 16 October 2009 (UTC)

• birdwatching: which birds live here? Any other wildlife like insects, lizards etc.

 Done Couldn't find any relevant information. LouriePieterse 11:34, 18 July 2009 (UTC)

--Redtigerxyz ^Talk 14:10, 10 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments by Rubenescio

• The lead section should introduce the article by summarizing it, not by only discussing facts not mentioned elsewhere in the article. See Wikipedia:Lead section.

 Done Improved lead to the correct standard. LouriePieterse 09:17, 17 October 2009 (UTC)

• The meaning of verneuk in Dutch is more explicit then the meaning mentioned in the article (to trick, mislead or swindle). It literally means "to fuck up" with both its literal and figurative meaning. If this is the same in Afrikaans, I think the meaning in the article should be changed.

 Done The current meaning best fits the description. The one that actaully fits bests is trick. LouriePieterse 20:22, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

• Why is it called "Verneukpan"? Some etymological information would be nice.

 Done There is a part in the lead that describes it. LouriePieterse 13:35, 10 October 2009 (UTC)

• The province and country could be mentioned and wikilinked somewhere in the prose in the beginning of the article.

 Done LouriePieterse 20:24, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

• The article needs a section about the landscape and/or nature of the area, in which is also briefly explained what a salt pan is.

 Done Added section about the nature of the area. LouriePieterse 13:27, 10 October 2009 (UTC)

• Perhaps a section "Sports" can be created, about aerotowing, kiting, and car racing. The different sports can be either paragraphs or subsections.

 Done I prefer the activities section. As soon as I have more information I would expand. LouriePieterse 20:35, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

• An image of the area would be nice.

 Done Added images. LouriePieterse 20:25, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

• The see also section can be removed, since is already linked in the article.

 Done I rather added more links to the see also. LouriePieterse 20:30, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Success with the article! Rubenescio (talk) 14:52, 22 July 2009 (UTC)