Wikipedia:Peer review/Smallville (season 1)/archive1

Smallville (season 1)[edit]

I recently reformatted the entire page, and added a load of real world information. I'm looking for some help sprucing up the wording, developing the flow better, etc. It's hard to notice things when you've been working so close to a specific project, and it's something you follow outside of Wikipedia. You get into the problem of not recognizing things that others might not understand from reading the article, that you would normally get because you follow the show. BIGNOLE (Contact me) 15:01, 16 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Anyone? BIGNOLE (Contact me) 15:04, 21 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  - The episode numbers are formatted like so: "1 - 101", how come? What's all the 101, 102, etc, about? Matthew 13:19, 23 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    - Aren't they listed that way on the DVD inserts? I can't remember off the top of my head, and I can't verify it until I get home, but I could have sworn that they are listed as 101, 102, 102 (hundreds being the season and the ones being the episode number) in either the booklet that comes with the DVD or when you're are in the DVD menu screen. The single numbers to the left are the "count". They carry over to each succeeding season. BIGNOLE (Contact me) 13:23, 23 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
      - I don't know, personally, as I haven't got the DVD. If they're listed like that, though, then that's good enough for me. Matthew 13:28, 23 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
        I will send myself an email so that I don't forget and check it when I get home. If they aren't listed there, then they can be removed. They aren't detrimental to have, but it's kind of nice to have some kind of production code. I'll check and make sure though. BIGNOLE (Contact me) 13:33, 23 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I'm my lunch break--I checked the booklet and the DVD, didn't see them identify episodes as anything other than titles. I checked TV Guide and the CW neither use that. It may have been something Kryptonsite used, so since that has no bearing on what is actually used I removed it. I'll remove it from the others when I return to work. BIGNOLE (Contact me) 18:59, 23 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.

Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 50ft, use 50 ft, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 50 ft.^[?]
Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “~~All~~ pigs are pink, so we thought of ~~a number of~~ ways to turn them green.”
Avoid using contractions like (outside of quotations): ISN'T, doesn't, doesn't, doesn't.

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 10:50, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I attempted to clean up the concerns. I fixed the measurement space issue, and the contractions. I tried to reword things to fix the redundancies and vague terms, but someone else might need to go through with a fresh pair of eyes and catch any I missed. BIGNOLE (Contact me) 13:41, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Firstly, I think the lead is a little too long. You could probably lose some of the special effects info from the second paragraph. Secondly, what's going on with the DVD cover in the infobox? Infoboxes tend to have images which represent the subject of the article; surely a DVD cover represents a DVD rather than the season itself? Brad 10:31, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

- I'll check out the lead and see what I can do. As for the image, television shows don't typically get official posters released for them, so the DVD cover art tends to be the closest thing to an image that represents the season as you can come by. BIGNOLE (Contact me) 11:25, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  - Couldn't Image:Smallville poster1.jpg do the job? Brad 12:04, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    - That was a teaser for the pilot, not the season. They didn't order a full season till after episode 2. Plus, where would the conformity be with the rest of the season articles. BIGNOLE (Contact me) 12:13, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    - If season posters for all could be found, that would be great, but the WB and currently the CW haven't really issued any. They use to issue episode posters for some episodes (I know Season 5 got a lot of episode posters), but not a lot for the season as a whole. That's why general consensus has always been to stick to the DVD cover art, as all seasons, and shows for that matter, get that treatment. And technically, a poster is nothing more than cover art, and a DVD box set cover art for season X is illustrating what the studio feels represents that season (or whoever they hired to come up with the design). BIGNOLE (Contact me) 12:15, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I trimmed the second paragraph some. BIGNOLE (Contact me) 12:30, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]