Wikipedia:Peer review/Marisa Wegrzyn/archive1

Marisa Wegrzyn

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Something I made recently, has been featured on DYK, and I've exhausted my sources. I wondering what this takes to get to GA, whether it be prose, content, more sources, whatever. I'm working on getting a free picture.

Cheers, Mm40 (talk) 01:05, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments:

• The article is very short (350 words), and you should be looking to expand it. I will make suggestions where I can.
• Biographical articles nearly always have infoboxes. I don't like them myself, but it seems to be the convention. In this case it might add some weight to the article to have one, even minus a picture.
• Lead:
  • There probably isn't much more to be said, but it could certainly be said more smoothly than it is with these four jerky sentences. **"Future" plays? I think you mean either "later" or "subsequent", not "future".
  • Also, "two more are being written" is only true for the time being. You need a more general way of referring to her future plans.
• Early life:
  • Do we know where she went to school?
  • Do we know when she went to Washington University?
  • Do we know what she studied there?
  • Do we know who put her in touch with the Steppenwolf?
  • A brief description of this institution and its work would be helpful.
• Career:
  • Do we know what Wegrzyn did between leaving Washington University in 2003 and the premiere of The Barber of Baraboo?
  • The critics and/or journals that gave the various reviews should be identified in the text.
• Wasserstein Prize
  • Phrasing: "Wergzyn won third annual the Wasserstein Prize..."
  • Do we have any more writing history for Hickorydickory than the year it was started?
  • "never-produced" is a clumsy and contrived adjective. Suggest you rephrase, indicating that the play had not been performed up to that time.
  • Explanation required for the Second Stage Theatre, e.g. what is it, where is it etc.

That's all I can come up with. I hope this helps. There needs to be a link to this PR page on the article's talk page. Brianboulton (talk) 23:54, 14 December 2009 (UTC)