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I've listed this to see what it needs to take it to a featured list level. Looking at List of number-one albums of 2008 (Japan), it doesn't seem too far off. Thanks for any pointers! --Prosperosity (talk) 05:29, 12 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This is certainly not my area of expertise, and perhaps for that reason I found it interesting. I have only a few suggestions, mostly related to prose and style.

Title

  • Date ranges in Wikipedia articles take en dashes rather than hyphens. The title should be changed to:
List of number one Reco-kyō Chart singles 2006–2009 (Japan)

Parentheses

  • I'd suggest using parentheses more sparingly. Alternatives include commas and em dashes or re-writes that avoid the need for parenthetical remarks. See example in Lead below.

Lead

  • "The monthly highest-selling ringtones in Japan were ranked by the Recording Industry Association of Japan from August 2006 until February 2009, on the Reco-kyō Chart (レコ協チャート, Record Association Chart) (formally the Yūryō Ongaku Haishin Chart (有料音楽配信チャート, Paid Music Distribution Chart))." - Nested parentheses are confusing. Suggestion: "The monthly highest-selling ringtones in Japan were ranked by the Recording Industry Association of Japan from August 2006 until February 2009 on the Reco-kyō Chart (レコ協チャート, Record Association Chart), formally known as the Yūryō Ongaku Haishin Chart (有料音楽配信チャート, Paid Music Distribution Chart).
  • Fixed, I think? I definitely switched a lot of the wording around, it's much more readable now. Prosperosity (talk) 22:19, 20 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the identically named RIAJ Digital Track Chart" - I found this statement puzzling at first because it seemed to be saying that "RIAJ Digital Track Chart" was identical in name to " Paid Music Distribution Chart". I'm not sure how to fix this except by deleting "identically named"?
  • "Three songs are tied for the most months charted: Thelma Aoyama feat." - What does "feat" mean in this context?
  • "of all-time in Japan across all formats (digital, physical, etc) - It would be better to fill in the meaning of "etc." or else delete it. What does "physical" format mean? I think it would be more helpful to name the formats.
  • Fixed, though it's a bit difficult now. I can't exhaustively list out all the Japanese formats ever used (vinyl, MD, 8cm single, 12cm single, etc.) because that gives the false impression that the song was released in all of these. Prosperosity (talk) 22:19, 20 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • One-sentence orphan paragraphs are generally frowned upon. Better would be to combine the two one-sentence orphans at the end of the lead.

Other

  • The alt-text tool at the top of this review page shows that the images need alt text, meant for readers who can't see the images. WP:ALT has details.
  • The dab checker finds one link that goes to a disambiguation page rather than the intended target.

I hope these few suggestions are helpful. Finetooth (talk) 01:41, 20 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks a bunch for having a look at the page! It's a great help. --Prosperosity (talk) 22:19, 20 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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