Wikipedia:Peer review/Freak Out!/archive1

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Freak Out![edit]

I did a lot of work on this article to bring it from its original state to its current level of quality. How did I do? (Ibaranoff24 11:50, 21 January 2007 (UTC)) (To clarify, I am trying to get this article to FA status. - Ibaranoff24 02:32, 22 January 2007 (UTC))[reply]

Trebor[edit]

I like it, good work. My main problem is the second paragraph of the lead because, while written in very attractive prose, it doesn't seem particularly encyclopaedic. It's very POV - obviously written by a Zappa fan - and without citations, it's also original research. Added to that, the lead is meant to be a summary of the article, yet most of the points raised aren't mentioned later on. Also, is there any more information on the inspiration for some of the songs on the album? Aside from that, I like it. Trebor 23:31, 21 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Quick response! Looking at it in more detail (it'd also be useful to know what you're aiming for with this - featured?):
  • Freak Out! was one of the earliest double albums, and also one of the earliest concept albums - too similar to the sentence in the lead without enough expansion. Perhaps just explain how it was a concept album and don't repeat that's it's a "double".
  • The Beatles' Sgt. Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band - wikilink
  • Is there any more information that could be added on people's opinions today (like the top 500 album of all time ranking)? Trebor 23:50, 21 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]