Wikipedia:Peer review/Eva Green/archive1

Eva Green

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good article

Thanks, Ultra! 17:56, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Just a comment - it is helpful to know what your expectations are when asking for a review. Two words "Good article" does not help much - I see that this is a GA, so I will assume you want to go for FA at some point. Interesting article, makes me want to see more of her films. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

• The lead is supposed to summarize the whole article and nothing in the lead should not also be in the article itself. The quotes in the lead do not seem to be in the main text. See WP:LEAD
• Spell out British Academy of Film and Television Arts (BAFTA) followed by the abbreviation - also which award specficially did she get? Best lead actress presumably? Ah wait, at the very end we learn it is Rising star - say this earlier please.
• The article seems a bit short for FA and will likely have to be expanded if FA is the goal and as she makes more films, etc. If it is, the lead will also need to be made longer.
• Writing is generally good, but there a few awkward places, such as She was a piece of last-minute casting for the role of Vesper Lynd..., so a copyedit couldn't hurt
• Some of the sources seem open to question at FAC, for example is Yahoo! Movies a WP:RS? Or Superherohype.com?
• Roger Ebert has all his reviews online and I know he reviewed The Dreamers and Casino Royale - these may have useful critical reaction.
• Is this a magazine or book or what? Daniel Schweiger. "All Hail The Queen: Eva Green Rules Supreme Over The Kingdom of Heaven", Venice, May 2005, pp. 60-63. Seems to be missing some information - how would I find this if I wanted to read it? See WP:V
• A model article that is already FA may be helpful here.

Hope this helps - mostly nitpicky comments as this is pretty good already, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 02:22, 22 April 2008 (UTC)