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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted 17:58, 31 March 2008.

The Office (U.S. season 1)[edit]

The first nomination for this article. It's substantially similar in aspects of cast and production to another of my articles, The Office (U.S. season 3), but of course different in many other ways. I've worked and tinkered on this list for a while, and I feel that it's ready for FLC. Mastrchf91 (t/c) 23:57, 11 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Matthew

Comments

  • The DVD image is rather large. Most season articles size them at around 250px.
  • "The first season debuted as a midseason replacement, and thus had only roughly half of the episodes that the first full season was proposed to have."
    • "Roughly half" isn't an encyclopaedic term
    • Any idea what show it replaced?
    • If a regular season has 24ish episodes, 6 would be a third.
      • My earlier change negated the need to change this. Mastrchf91 (t/c) 21:20, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Did it originally have a full-season order? Why was it cut back to 6? A reference should back this claim up
  • Aren't Gervais and Merchant exec producers?
  • Make the distinction clearer regarding directors in the number of episodes they have directed. "Ken Kwapis, who would go on to direct nine total episodes, directed the first two episodes "Pilot" and "Diversity Day", " → "Ken Kwapis directed the first two episodes "Pilot" and "Diversity Day", and has directed seven other episodes throught the series", or something, for example.
  • Why is {{episode list}} not used?
    • I'm not sure. The format was lifted from the main episode page, and I just expanded the plot summaries of each. Mastrchf91 (t/c) 21:20, 13 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think it should be used. It will format the headers into the Wikipedia-friendly order of

|| # || TITLE || WRITERS || DIRECTOR || AIRDATE || PROD CODE

  • A reference for production code is needed I think, since they were filmed out of broadcast sequence.

That's it. -- Matthew | talk | Contribs 19:50, 12 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I've finished all of your requests. Mastrchf91 (t/c) 19:14, 15 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm gathering resources and references as of now, and season 2's not far away. Mastrchf91 (t/c) 20:49, 22 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Good work, there's not many things I have to whinge about!
    • "Schrute, Halpert, Phyllis Lapin, portrayed by Phyllis Smith, and Stanley Hudson, portrayed by Leslie David Baker, compose the sales division of Dunder Mifflin Scranton" - I had to read this sentence a few times (and I'm not that stupid) before I realised it does actually make sense. Maybe reword or place "(portrayed by)" in brackets like so, just to avoid comma confusion.
    • pop culture obsessed -> pop culture-obsessed
    • Again, sad eyed -> sad-eyed
    • "and said "Maybe, after "The Office" dies a quick death on NBC, the network will decide that trying to Americanize British TV comedies isn't such a great idea."" - change the internal quotation marks to the single-apostrophe-type-things as in 'The Office' as a quote-within-a-quote.
    • Time Magazine, Pittsburgh Post-Gazette and Coupling should be italicised.
    • "18-49" should have a bigger dash, like in "2004–2005" below it.
    • "as well as ranked third for number of viewers on its night" - changed ranked to ranking.
    • "between the change from the first episode and the second episode, Office moved to its regular time slot" - seems to be called "The Office" everywhere else.
    • "just over half of that from the previous episode" - should be "half that of"
  • =D —97198 talk 06:10, 17 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose The lead is not written well enough to be featured. Almost every sentence in the lead starts with "the first season...". The first two sentences start identically with "the first season premiered...". Can someone copyedit it, please?--Crzycheetah 07:59, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thanks. The only remaining comment I have is the format of the references. Shouldn't all full dates be linked? Most of the retrieval dates are not linked. Also, the last reference uses the {{cite news}} template, maybe it should be done manually as other references were done?--Crzycheetah 19:19, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I've dated all of the references, and changed the last reference from the template to conform with the other references. Mastrchf91 (t/c) 19:58, 29 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Much better, good job overall!--Crzycheetah 20:03, 30 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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