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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 23:27, 3 July 2015 [1].

Vision in White[edit]

Nominator(s): Karanacs (talk) 16:10, 11 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

This article has something to interest both women and men, those who settle in with a good book to relax and those who'd rather boot up their computer and play a video game, introverts and, well, introverts. Vision in White is a romance novel written by bestselling author Nora Roberts. The book was later turned into a video game, which is really odd for a romance novel. WP's coverage of romance novels is pitiful, and the newly launched WikiProject Romance is attempting to fill those gaps. This article is only the third romance-novel related FA nomination ever (the others being articles I wrote five+ years ago).

Although it is at its core a love story, don't worry, I sprayed for cooties before I hit save. Karanacs (talk) 16:10, 11 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment: hello Karanacs, I remember you from a long time ago. I've only read the WP:LEDE and my comment may simply be a matter of preference rather than need (so it may not need to be addressed in article text), but I found the lead a bit confusing. Because I'd never heard of Nora Roberts, I was surprised that the publisher needed a special logo to distinguish this book from reprints etc. So, is the wikilink to Roberts enough to cover her long career, or should it be mentioned? This depends on your personal definition of "stand-alone article." • Arch♦Reader 03:21, 12 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • Hey Ling, nice to see you (although I was a bit confused by the name change at first)! That's a great point, thank you. I rewrote the lead, and I think it makes a bit more sense now. Karanacs (talk) 14:15, 12 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. These are my edits. It's really nice to see a new wikiproject interested in FAC, especially one of particular interest to women. This would make a great TFA. - Dank (push to talk) 22:45, 12 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, your changes were an improvement :) Karanacs (talk) 22:52, 12 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Looks pretty good. A couple of comments:

  • "On average, she completes a book every 45 days." – If this refers to 1979 through 2008 from the previous sentence, it should be completed; otherwise, it should be specified as being as of the date from the source
  • "...and celebrate the women's success at niche marketing." – Maybe its just me, but when I first read this, my initial reaction was 'which women?'. Is there another way of wording this so it more explicitly refers to the fictional characters?

- Evad37 [talk] 00:45, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, I addressed both of these. Karanacs (talk) 14:35, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Evad37 [talk] 18:23, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Source review (spot checks not done)

  • The use of title case or sentence case should be consistent for at least the same type of source (if not the whole article)
  • ISBN for Prioleau (2013) doesn't seem to go anywhere, can you check for typos?
  • Sources appear to be reliable in the context of what they support, no obvious reliability issues
  • I did some copy editing of refs here [2] to fix minor issues.

- Evad37 [talk] 01:10, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

    • The ISBN is for the ebook version of Prioleau's work. I double-checked the number, and if I google it, it brings me to a copy of the book. I don't know why it isn't showing up in the BookSources search.
    • I think I fixed all the case issues with the newspaper sources. I left the book titles as they were published. Karanacs (talk) 14:35, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      • Thanks, issues resolved - Evad37 [talk] 18:23, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Image review: FUR for lead image should be expanded, and the "n.a." parameters filled in. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:06, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Nikkimaria, thanks for the feedback, images are not my specialty. I hope that this [3] is better. Karanacs (talk) 14:35, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Better but for one issue - is Roberts herself the copyright holder of the book cover? Typically that would be either the publisher or the designer/photographer. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:04, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Good point. I changed it to "Illustrator unknown; published by Berkley" Karanacs (talk) 15:31, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose. Spot check of online sources show they back up claims. Ceoil (talk) 11:45, 20 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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