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The article was promoted by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 04:19, 7 January 2019 [1].

Red-bellied black snake[edit]

Nominator(s): Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:52, 18 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a critter I once saw in my garden....much to my chagrin. It got a pretty good going over at GAN. I reckon it's within striking distance of FA-hood. Have at it. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:52, 18 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

FunkMonk[edit]

  • Seems you're having a snake season (coupled with black mamba)? Will look soon. FunkMonk (talk) 04:21, 20 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Australia is duplinked in the intro. Should it be linked at all?
no, removed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:13, 20 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "37 mg of venom", " being 94 mg", "high as 7 mg/kg" and "2.52 mg/kg", are there conversions for these?
mixed feeling here - these are all more pharmacological and I think even Americans and British will use mg here (much like drug doses) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:13, 20 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "78 cm (for males) or 88 cm" Conversions needed.
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:13, 20 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Shouldn't the intro have something on its behaviour?
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:22, 20 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Still think it would be cool to show the small cobra-like hood[2], perhaps in the venom section, as this is after all how I guess it looks right before it strikes... I can remove the watermark. That photo is also good as it is the only one that shows the distinct orange underside of the snake.
ok go for it Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:22, 20 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Here:[3] FunkMonk (talk) 13:07, 20 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
ok added now. feel free to rejuggle images (why do we have all these left-facing snakes??) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:16, 20 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
The coiled[4] photo faced right, I guess it was removed as the new image was added, but maybe it could be left aligned under behaviour if it adds anything? Or maybe I'm the only one obsessed with showing a subject from every possible angle/demeanour... FunkMonk (talk) 15:22, 21 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Hmm, it doesn't add a huge deal but if it can be added without crowding the article then ok I guess.. have a play if you want Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:45, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Now only some people mentioned are presented, others get nothing.
I think I got 'em all now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 01:29, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "This beautiful snake, which appears to be unprovided with tubular teeth or fangs, and consequently not of a venomous nature" This seems entirely wrong, I wonder if something like "he incorrectly wrote" could be added?
I haven't seen a source that actually says he's incorrect (which he obviously is). If I find I will add found and added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:30, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The species name is derived from the Ancient Greek porphyreus" You haven't even mentioend the species name until that point though.
rejigged Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:20, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "though several subsequent species have been added." Why "though"? Seems to be fairly standard practice.
rejigged so not contrastive Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:20, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hoser is notorious, so I wonder if his views are given undue weight and could be trimmed a bit further?
thing is, there are three disjunct populations, so he has possibly got precedence at some point if it is found they are genetically distinct. Also the snake taxonomy issue is huge - see this, this and this. Still he is familiar with the snakes. see this. fun pets, eh? So I think the best response is to lay it all out. I suspect there will be genetic work soon. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:27, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • What does the genus name mean?
added now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:12, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Naja porphyrica Schlegel" No discussion of this synonym?
added, though annoying as postdates Wagler's erection of genus. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:05, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • ""Coluber porphyriacus", Zoology and botany of New Holland (1794)" I wonder if it would be more relevant if the caption stated specifically it was an illustration form the original description?
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:30, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "eggs of a green tree snake" Link in caption?
linked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:31, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • " It is on average around 1.25 metres" The last thing you mentioned was the tail, so perhaps good to specify it is the whole snake you're talking about here.
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:21, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link elapid at first mention in taxonomy instead of description.
done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:34, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Macquarie Marshes marks" Mark?
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:31, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "They also thermoregulate" Link?
linked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:09, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • " In July 1949, six large red-bellied black snakes were found hibernating under a concrete slab in marshland in Woy Woy, New South Wales.[30] Groups of up to 6 hibernating red-bellied black snakes have been recorded from under concrete slabs around Mount Druitt and Rooty Hill in western Sydney" Why are the years or locations significant? Isn't the take home point that, in both case,s up to six have been found hibernating together?
July=a part of winter, year just because it was a while ago, locations as some are quite urban actually. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:09, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "1220 m in a day" Convert.
done...though have a dilemma about whether to convert to miles or feet. Makes more sense as former Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:24, 25 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "cane toad toxins.[33] The introduction of cane toads in Australia dates to 1935, when cane toads (Rhinella marina)" Why only give the scientific name on second mention?
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:17, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "by kookaburras, brown falcons" No links or scientific names?
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:17, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • myotoxicity, diaphoresis, polypeptide, link?
first already done with myotoxin linked, second removed, third now linked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:17, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "While black snake antivenom" Link?
it doesn't have a separate page. None of the antivenoms seem to Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:41, 26 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "it is one of Australia's most familiar snakes" Only seems to be stated in the intro.
changed to "most commonly encountered" (which is more factual anyway) and put in main as well and cited Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 01:56, 26 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

William Harris[edit]

Support - External links updated, disimbag links zero. Bonza work on a well-known acquaintance of mine. William Harris • (talk) • 20:41, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

thx! Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:19, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hawkeye7[edit]

Support I have a red-bellied black snake living under my front porch.

A cheaper pet to operate than my Ridgeback/Mastiff!! William Harris • (talk) • 06:04, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "analyzed" should be " analysed"?
I suppose...changed. thx for support. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:09, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Image review
All images have appropriate licences. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 04:59, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Opabinia[edit]

I originally was just going to read the venom section, since I wrote some articles on snake venom toxins awhile back, but it's not long, so...

  • From the taxonomy section, the original 1794 description (erroneously) claimed it wasn't venomous. Later, in the venom section, the article says "early" settlers were afraid of it. Do we know anything about how impressions evolved over time, from not venomous to dangerous?
I haven't seen anything on this to date and was curious myself. It was certainly known to be poisonous by 1869 (see here). I'll see what I can find Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:16, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Minor point, but it seems like you could make a stronger statement about Hoser's proposed classifications based on the Kaiser review. As written, and without knowing anything about Hoser, it sort of sounds like a routine scientific dispute rather than "one guy self-published a bunch of stuff that academics don't take seriously".
The challenge is emphasising it without it coming across as POV. How is this? Enough of a nudge in the right direction? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:58, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • There's two mentions of individual (and fairly old) reports of hibernation, but nothing more general - is hibernating normal/common behavior, or is it just sporadically observed?
Took some digging but discovered that elapids here in oz generally have a sort of "light" hibernation where they will come out occasionally on warm days - added now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:02, 26 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The article says pregnancy happens in the early spring to late summer, lasts 14 weeks, and results in births mostly in February or March. It took me an embarrassingly long time trying to make those things consistent before I remembered oh yeah, Australia :) But I bet I'm not the only northern-hemisphere inhabitant who'd find that confusing.
I added this at the first mention of seasons. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:16, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The source for the 25-year lifespan says it is about snakes in captivity. Anything known about whether this is different in the wild?
I have not seen anything on this sadly Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:16, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • I poked around quickly and didn't find anything, but you'd know better than me - any idea on the mechanism for the anosmia? That's weird.
nada as yet... Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:16, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The sentence mentioning α-elapitoxin-Ppr1 seems a little jarringly technical relative to the rest of the text, especially without a wikilink. (I'd suggest at least linking to the protein family, three-finger toxin, but COI alert, I wrote that article.)
Happy to follow your lead in how to insert that into the article Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:53, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done here, feel free to edit, of course :) Opabinia regalis (talk) 20:05, 28 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • There's a few instances of in-text attribution by name where the name isn't wikilinked and doesn't seem significant - I'd expect that way of introducing a study to indicate that its author is notable or significant in some way, that the reader needs to know or will be interested in who specifically did the work. I noticed this in the venom section, about Vaughan, Schmidt and Middlebrook; the same applies to Kaiser above.
Removed. I hesitated about Kaiser as it was fairly confrontational...but then realised a whole lotta folks agree with him (Kaiser) so removed. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:32, 26 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Speaking of Vaughan, I was unclear why the fairly old research characterizing pseudexin warranted its own paragraph, given that pseudexin itself has no article and PLA2s are very common venom components; I think it'd be worth mentioning here that pseudexin accounts for 25% of whole venom.
Added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:32, 26 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The article says bites are "generally treated" with tiger snake venom. I think it's more the case that "when antivenom is used, it's generally tiger snake venom", isn't it? Churchman 2010 says only 39% of the bite victims in its survey got antivenom at all.
Yep - tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:34, 26 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Super nitpick: Churchman 2010 says that black snake antivenom is cheaper and can be used at lower volume, but doesn't claim there's a causal relationship between those two things. The article says "can be used at a lower dose and is thus a cheaper treatment" (my emphasis), which is a little more than what the source says (though maybe it's in other sources). Also, lower volume isn't necessarily lower dose, unless you know they're the same concentration.
good points - tweaked x 2 Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:36, 26 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The paper about evolution in response to cane toads (which was cool!) implies, but doesn't say outright, that snake populations had declined in areas with lots of toads, but this doesn't come up in the conservation section. Is that not a significant effect overall (only small areas of overlap?), or does it not come up in the sources?
Confounding this is that they seem to have become less common overall due to the global decline in frogs. Will see if I can find any more exact sources Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:46, 26 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Knowing they're kept as pets made me wonder how many of those bites mentioned earlier in the article were from captive snakes vs encounters in the wild. Are they bred as pets, or are they captured in the wild? Opabinia regalis (talk) 09:19, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
This study says 11% of people bitten are snake handlers (but they might be trying to catch snakes on properties etc.) - seems mostly to be people in the outdoors actually. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:33, 25 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
thx! Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:33, 30 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Support by Ceoil[edit]

Notwithstanding the remaining points above, support on prose, after some fairly trivial copy edits. Very straightforwardly and clearly written. Ceoil (talk) 23:07, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

thx - St Patrick never made it to Oz. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:20, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Coord note[edit]

Source review? Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 23:52, 31 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Sources are all authoritative and of high quality. Not seeing any formatting issues. Ceoil (talk) 23:25, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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