Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Rachelle Ann Go/archive1

Rachelle Ann Go[edit]

Featured article candidates/Rachelle Ann Go/archive1

Nominator(s): Pseud 14 (talk) 01:10, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

After previously working on a Filipino music BLP of a band, here's my next work on singer and actress Rachelle Ann Go. She began her career in pop music after winning a talent show in the Philippines, before transitioning to musical theatre. Some of her earlier roles on stage include Ariel from The Little Mermaid and Jane Porter from Tarzan. She had her international breakthrough portraying a hardened bargirl in the 2014 West End revival of Miss Saigon, reprising the part on Broadway in 2017. She followed this with more prominent roles on West End, playing Fantine in Les Misérables and Eliza Schuyler in Hamilton. Constructive criticism, in any form and from anyone, will be appreciated. Happy to address your comments and thanks to all who take the time to review. Pseud 14 (talk) 01:10, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from ZooBlazer[edit]

~~Saving a spot.~~ -- Zoo Blazer 18:21, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"Go then competed at the 2004 Shanghai Music Festival and the 2005 Astana Song Festival, each winning the Silver Prize and Best Song" --> Needs a little rewording. It doesn't make it sound like she won.

I've tweaked it a bit for clarity. Hopefully that reads better. Happy to change if still ambiguous.

"Go's father raised her to pursue musical interests and would encourage her to perform in front of a crowd" --> Go's father raised her to pursue musical interests and encouraged her to perform in front of crowds

Done

Link bachelor's degree

Done

"where she later advanced as one of the ten grand finalists" --> this might just be a personal preference, so feel free to ignore if you disagree, but what about "where she would advance as one of the ten grand finalists"

Done as suggested.

'featured vocals on a cover "Love of My Life"' --> featured vocals on a cover of "Love of My Life"

Thanks for catching this. Done

"The track list initially contained songs Go had written, but decided against including it" --> this refers to the unreleased songs, correct? "...songs Go had written, but she decided against including them"

That is right. I've revised per your suggestion.

Link DVD
"a concert staged at the Music Museum on October 26, 2012" --> The paragraph starts with "Go began 2012", so you could probably just make the date October 26 without the year

Agreed. Done.

Link R&B in its first use

If this the R&B singer Alicia Keys (I think), I've linked it now.

She also considers Patti LuPone as one" --> Start the sentence with Go to avoid any confusion as the previous sentence was about what Salonga said

Good point. Done

"Early in her career, Go's singing style has drawn comparisons to Carey" --> drew comparisons

Done

Unlink Celine Dion from the influences section as it is a DUPLINK

Unlinked

That's all from me. Another great article from you. -- Zoo Blazer 17:42, 30 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@ZooBlazer: thanks very much for your review. All comments actioned and addressed. Let me know if I might have missed anything. Thank you for sparing your time. Pseud 14 (talk) 18:09, 30 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good to me. Happy to support! Good luck the rest of the way with this nom. -- Zoo Blazer 22:20, 30 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image/media review - passes[edit]

Both images are properly licensed, have alt text, and use makes sense in the article.
There's one sound sample. It is under 10% of the full song, properly licensed, and its use fits the article.

I'll be back with prose comments later, but I did the image review and found no issues, so it passes. -- Zoo Blazer 18:21, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for doing the image review, and appreciate your time in having a look. Pseud 14 (talk) 18:30, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit]

"performed rock-influenced covers in the live album" => "performed rock-influenced covers on the live album"

Done

"eponymous brand of bridal line" => "eponymous brand of bridal wear"

Done

"were impressed of the overall production" => "were impressed with the overall production"

Done

"Described as a "hodgepodge" of wide-ranging global influences, Go again employed" - it (presumably) wasn't Go who was described as a hodgepodge. Presumably it was the album that was described in that way?

Oh right, I see where my error is. Thanks for catching that. I've revised it so that it begins with The album was described as ..., and Go again..

"Go recorded "Paano" for the compilation album GV25" - album title should be in italics

Thanks for catching this too. Done

"Critics were generally enthusiastic with the depth of her characterization" => "Critics were generally enthusiastic about the depth of her characterization"

Done

"While for her cover album Falling in Love" => "For her cover album Falling in Love"

Done

"and has sang "Butterfly" and "Never Too Far" in one of her first headlining shows" => "and sang "Butterfly" and "Never Too Far" in one of her first headlining shows"

Done

"A reviewer from The Philippine Star has characterized her debut album as" => "A reviewer from The Philippine Star characterized her debut album as"

Done

"As of 2020, they reside" - 2020 was four years ago, so if no more up-to-date info is available this should be "As of 2020, they resided"

That is correct, they still live here. Done as suggested.

That's what I got. Great work as ever! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 14:24, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your helpful review ChrisTheDude. All comments have been actioned. Let me know if I might have missed anything. And thanks for the edits you did a while back on instances that require BE'ing. Pseud 14 (talk) 16:03, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 17:49, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

750h[edit]

Hi @Pseud 14: I have one minor concern: After Go's musical transition to theater in 2011,[126] reviewers were appreciative of her clear and sweet-sounding vocals… I recommend changing “were appreciative” to “appreciated” for conciseness. 750h+ | Talk 14:56, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for driving by 750h+. Done as suggested. Pseud 14 (talk) 15:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Support. I don’t have anything else. Great work, your articles are always nice to read! 750h+ | Talk 15:02, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Averageuntitleduser[edit]

I plan to review this. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 12:11, 24 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Averageuntitleduser, sorry to chase you, just checking in if you're getting around to reviewing? Pseud 14 (talk) 15:20, 27 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies, yes, it is on my roster today! Averageuntitleduser (talk) 16:17, 27 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I've only got minor nit-picks so far. The article feels very fluid and addresses thoroughly the recording, style, and reception of her works. I'll be finishing up tomorrow, in the meantime, feel free to revert any of my copy changes.

"Pasig, Metro Manila" — as done in the infobox, combine the second unit's link into the first.

Done

Perhaps add "contest" before "Birit Baby" for clarity. It is implied, but would still soften the surprise.

Done

Perhaps add "her rendition of (Regine Velasquez's)" before "Isang Lahi", this likely doesn't require a source, but it'd be easy nevertheless.

Agreed. I have added as suggested

Perhaps expand "OPM" and then bracket it.

Done

"wrote that the album is 'another proof..." — a more common phrase would be: "wrote that the album is more 'proof...".

Done

"(2009)" — for internal consistency, perhaps move the "2009" before "fifth studio album".

Since the sentence begins with Also that year (which I just realized) referring to 2009, I dropped the enclosure or putting 2009 before it. Hopefully that still works. 2009 nth studio album is not usually a practice I have seen in music articles. I think it's either 2009 studio album or nth studio album.... In this case, I think it would be preferable to go with the chronology.

Thanks for the review so far Averageuntitleduser. Your comments have been very helpful. I have provided my responses above. Let me know if there's anything I may have missed. Pseud 14 (talk) 14:09, 28 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source review

I see no major prose issues, so a source review should be your last hurdle! A spotcheck will be necessary since this is a BLP. MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 10:56, 25 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 22 has no links- is there a reason for that?

I used the newspaper article as an offline source, as I could not find it archived online. I stumbled upon the full article posted to an online forum for verification, but for some reason it doesn't work anymore when I tried accessing it (at least for me). Alternatively, this link also provides the lists the nominees, but I have reservations if it is high-quality enough to be used. So I stuck with an offline source instead, as that seems to be much more acceptable (hopefully). Pseud 14 (talk) 12:43, 25 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'm impressed to find no other problems- well done! Spotcheck coming soon MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 10:56, 25 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking on the source review MyCatIsAChonk. Provided my response above. Really appreciate your time in doing it. Pseud 14 (talk) 12:43, 25 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

All good on 22. Spotcheck now, choosing randomly, AGF for Tagalog sources:

2: all uses good
3: all uses good
11: good
21: good
36: good
44: good
53: good
70: good
80: good
93: good
106: good
118: good
133: good
145: good

I'm impressed to say that all spotchecks and the source review pass- very well done! Sorry for the delay- I am very impressed by your in-depth work, and hope to see more in the future. MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 22:51, 25 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for doing the spotchecks MyCatIsAChonk. I really appreciate your time and effort. Absolutely no need to apologize. You've taken the time out of your busy schedule to provide your feedback and review, so I'm most grateful for it. Pseud 14 (talk) 22:57, 25 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]