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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 30 September 2019 [1].

Hurricane Sergio (2018)[edit]

Nominator(s): NoahTalk 18:32, 15 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I have spent a lot of time working on correcting the accuracy of and expanding Sergio's article. Although the impact was mainly minimal, I feel this article is now complete and satisfies the FA criteria. NoahTalk 18:32, 15 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Image Review[edit]

Images are appropriately licensed. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:32, 17 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Oof-off[edit]

Support - This article is comprehensive and covers all of the aspects of Sergio's life in a good amount of detail. In particular, the impact is extensively covered, and I can vouch that much time was put into making the impact as comprehensive as possible. The meteorological history is accurate and the sources are well-picked. The vast majority of the problems that were present before in the article, many of which have been pointed out here by other Wikipedia users, have been fixed already. I did fix one mistake which were related to improper use of "it's"/"its". Otherwise, the grammar and spelling is sound. I believe this article is worthy of feature article status. --Oof-off (talk) 03:07, 21 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

SC[edit]

Lead
  • It's a long first paragraph and contains ten uses of "Sergio" in twelve sentences: any chance some synonyms could be used, or even just an "it" or two?
  • Ditto para two – four "Sergio"s in six sentences. The same goes for the rest of the article, although to a lesser degree: there are a further sixteen in the body text, which could be trimmed here and there, particularly in the history section
Removed several mentions throughout the lead and MH. NoahTalk 14:27, 20 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
History
  • "about 18 hours as system underwent": the system?
Fixed. NoahTalk 14:27, 20 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That's it. Very minor, but the heavy use of the name needs to be addressed first. – SchroCat (talk) 13:31, 20 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Sources[edit]

Note
I don't speak Spanish, so this refers to the English language sources only
  • The sources seem reliable for the subject covered.
  • Further searches showed no additional obvious sources that have been missed off.
  • Spot checks on six sources verify the content claimed.
  • The same spot checks showed no plagiarism or close paraphrasing.
  • There are some very minor formatting issues that need sorting:
    • FN 13: "The Weather Channel. The Weather Channel." No need for the repetition – ditto on FN 28 "The Watchers. The Watchers"
    • FNs 14, 15, 24 and 25: El Universal, Diario de Yucatán El Imparcial and El Sol de Mexico are newspaper titles and so should be italicised. – check there are no others on this too. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 13:48, 20 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@SchroCat: That should be it. NoahTalk 14:25, 20 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Hurricanehink[edit]

With the caveat that I reviewed this article for A-class review, I believe this article passes all of the FA criteria, so I support the candidacy. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:59, 22 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support from KN2731[edit]

  • "Sergio was indeed a tropical storm, but unlike..." - no need to restate that Sergio was a TS, I think you can just start the sentence with "Unlike other tropical cyclones..."
Done. NoahTalk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The storm had developed a well-defined eye" - missing "At this point," or similar
Fixed. NoahTalk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "After bottoming out as a low-end Category 3" - Category 3 is not a noun, add "hurricane"
Fixed. NoahTalk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It unexpectedly acquired some annular characteristics on October 7, with the eye having doubled in size overnight" - large eye != annular, you may want to mention that rainbands dissipated too
Done. NoahTalk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "southern and eastern facing shores" --> "south- and east-facing shores"
    • Actually after looking more closely at the source only the easterly swells were caused by Sergio, so mentioning the advisory for the south-facing shores was issued "As a result" of Sergio is misleading. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 04:24, 25 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. NoahTalk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Arizona State Fair was closed due to flooding, the first time in 'recent memory'." - I feel the comma interrupts the flow here, maybe something like "Flooding forced the closure of [etc.] for the first time..." or "...was closed for the first time in 'recent memory' due to flooding" would be better
Changed. NoahTalk 11:45, 26 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "70 mph (115 km/h) wind gusts" - 60 knots converts to 69 mph (111 km/h)
Removed rounding. NoahTalk 11:45, 26 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That should be it. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 04:22, 25 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@KN2731: Should be everything. NoahTalk 11:45, 26 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
All changes addressed, moving to support. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 13:13, 26 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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