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Page for R Nandakumar

Dear LaMona, Thanks a lot. As per your suggestion have re-organised the sections, moving works of him in the general category Bibliography. He is notability is assured by the fact that he was conferred with the Kesari Memorial Award Instituted by the Department of Culture, Government of Kerala in the year 2007, and awareded prestigious Senior Nehru Fellowship Government of India in the year 2012. Request you to provide any more suggestions to improve this page. Regards Tirutirutiru (talk) 08:01, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Tirutirutiru, you still have extra sources, and it would be good to remove those. You should remove the entire section about him being cited by others. Those are not about him. I did find at least one article by him ("A Note on Edge Guards in Art Galleries") still. Rather than list groups of references (e.g. 1-7) you should be using those references to fill in information about him. With those references, you say that "he is an independent scholar" but none of those references actually say that, although they are evidence of it. But being evidence of it makes them primary sources, and then that part of the article is original research. You should be writing the article using what has been said about him by others (reliable others, of course), not drawing conclusions yourself from sources. Since he has major awards, you don't need to prove that he is a scholar, but you should then be writing an article that gives the reader an appreciation of the person, within the WP rules for citations. LaMona (talk) 09:45, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Rejection of Draft Page for Magnatag Visible Systems

Thanks for the feedback LaMona. I appreciate it!

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Rejection of Draft Page for James O'Connell

Hi LaMona, I just saw your detailed message. Thanks so much! I will make the changes accordingly. Best, Jimaning

Comment on draft page for Augustus Martin

Hi LaMona Thanks for your feedback, that was really helpful. I have changed the references for the Augustus Martin page and added dates, authors and company. I hope this time it passes

Please let me know anything else I need to do

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Thanks, LaMona! This is helpful. I've deleted the two Frick references that aren't just links to taped lectures, and edited out the over-exuberant sentence. I'll be very grateful for any other advice you can offer.

(I noticed you already have kittens and thought you might like a broader menagerie!)

Request on 08:55:25, 7 October 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Smartartone100

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09:15:42, 28 October 2015 review of submission by 41.242.137.2

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Hi La Mona, hello from Ghana. Does that mean I have to erase all the wikipedia/you tube references? (as well as adding third party ones?)