Template:Did you know nominations/chocoholic

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: rejected by SL93 (talk) 03:12, 1 August 2020 (UTC)
It was already on DYK.

Chocoholic

Dark chocolate
Dark chocolate
Dark, milk and white chocolate
Dark, milk and white chocolate

5x expanded by Emilyhawthorne (talk). Self-nominated at 07:18, 28 May 2020 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: None required.

Overall: What a delicious DYK. Although Earwig shows 33.8%, I find it likely to be a result of WP:CIRCULAR/copied from Wikipedia. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 14:15, 28 May 2020 (UTC)

  • Hi, I came by to promote this, but the more I read into it, the more I wonder if the article is really quoting the sources. I just removed a few cites that didn't mention chocolate at all. The source given for the hook on this template doesn't mention chocolate either. I think this article needs to be looked at by someone familiar with medical writing. Yoninah (talk) 02:35, 2 June 2020 (UTC)
  • Hi, I have reviewed your comments and made relevant changes in the article chocoholic in regards to citations. I have also updated the citation given in the first hook above to make it more relevant to the correlation between chocolate and genetics. Thank you for your comments and feedback. Emilyhawthorne (talk) 23:54, 2 June 2020 (UTC)
  • evrik 05:24, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
  • Article was expanded fivefold from May 23 to 28 and nominated within time. Length is adequate and article meets citation requirements for DYK. No plagiarism issues found. Comment from the previous review regarding WP:CIRCULAR/copied from Wikipedia still applies. All images used in the article are properly licensed on the Commons. Both images listed on this nomination are suitable for use as a DYK image. User has less than five DYK credits and no QPQ is required. Both hooks are interesting although ALT0 is best. Both are properly mentioned in the article and verified with the cited sources. I have several concerns for tone and neutrality. I have noted those with maintenance tags in the article. The entire section "popular usage" section is promotional in tone and very subjective. "Many diet books" is subjective and should be either quantified, backed up with names of well known books, or removed. The statement "and even" sounds like a cliche and is not backed up with names of books. The mentions of Sarkozy and Dairy Queen are trivial and add nothing to the article, unless more context is added. Flibirigit (talk) 07:45, 17 July 2020 (UTC)
  • I cleaned up the tags. --evrik (talk) 14:40, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
  • Thank you for your work, @Evrik:. I read through the whole article and while it reads well, the lead is not written in line with WP:LEAD. It reads more like the introduction to an essay, or, in Wikipedia's case, as the first subhead to be called "Description". I don't know if you're up to it, but a proper lead based on the main points in the article should be substituted here. Yoninah (talk) 22:21, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
  • I think the edits made by evrik (talk · contribs) improved the article. While the article's introduction could be improved, I think it is adequate and meets basic DYK guidelines. Also, for an article written by a student editor, this is better than average. I feel this nomination should be moved forward, and the article meets DYK criteria as per my review above and the recent changes. Flibirigit (talk) 16:13, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
Well... this is really awkward, but it appears myself and others failed to notice that this article has already apppeared on DYK and is ineligible to be listed again. On Talk:Chocoholic, there is clearly a notice about its appearance on DYK on 21 April 2013. Thanks to everyone who has helped improve the article so far, but I am really sorry to have to mark this for closure and I apologize for not seeing it sooner. Flibirigit (talk) 21:59, 31 July 2020 (UTC)