Template:Did you know nominations/Tumalo State Park

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 02:18, 30 September 2014 (UTC)

Tumalo State Park[edit]

5x expanded by Orygun (talk). Self nominated at 21:56, 20 September 2014 (UTC).

  • Expanded 5x on 20 September 2014 and within DYK time limits for nominations (nominated here on the same day as the expansion). Checks for copyvio reveals no problems. Every section (except for the lead) has inline citations to reliable sources. The nominator has fulfilled a QPQ review.
A problem is that the hook is not directly verified in the article at the end of the sentences where the content is stated (in the article's History section). Citations are present at the end of the paragraph. Per the DYK rules criteria #3, "Each fact in the hook must be supported in the article by at least one inline citation to a reliable source, appearing no later than the end of the sentence(s) offering that fact. Citations at the end of the paragraph are not sufficient." So, this needs to be tended to in order to move forward at this time. NorthAmerica1000 02:53, 21 September 2014 (UTC)
Comment - Also, the image to the right (in ALT1) could be used for the hook. NorthAmerica1000 02:56, 21 September 2014 (UTC)
  • In-line citation added.--Orygun (talk) 03:13, 21 September 2014 (UTC)
  • The sentence "Tumalo State Park was established in 1954." in the article still needs an inline citation in order to move forward. Also, the way the hook is worded, it sounds as if the park was created specifically to preserve a portion of the Deschutes River. Is this actually the case, or was the park also created for other reasons? NorthAmerica1000 03:51, 21 September 2014 (UTC)
  • Have added second in-line citation. Regarding purpose of the park, Merriam book (Reference 3) says: “The park was obtained to preserve a scenic portion of the Deschutes River Canyon where basalt bluffs extend down to the stream.” Armstrong book (Reference 2) says: “Preservation of this portion of the Deschutes River, a particularly scenic portion, for enjoyment by the public prompted acquisition of the park in order that much-needed picnic and camping facilities might be provided.” This reference to picnicking and camping was stated in last sentence of first paragraph in the article, but I didn’t use it in the hook.--Orygun (talk) 06:28, 21 September 2014 (UTC)
  • Good to go per inline citations added to the article and per clarification provided directly above. NorthAmerica1000 10:20, 21 September 2014 (UTC)
  • Here's an ALT1 below, the same as the hook, which also includes the image. NorthAmerica1000 10:24, 21 September 2014 (UTC)

The Deschutes River at Tumalo State Park

  • While I can confirm that the picture is in the article and has the proper license (added "(pictured)" to hook), I don't see that the review has addressed the bulk of the "Within policy" section: neutrality and close paraphrasing, etc. As soon as those important criteria are checked, assuming they're fine, then the nomination can be ticked again. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:09, 29 September 2014 (UTC)
  • Approved based on original review by Northamerica1000, with my own check of new image above. Apologies for missing the earlier copyvio check. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:13, 29 September 2014 (UTC)