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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 14:25, 14 November 2015 (UTC)

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Nako, Himachal Pradesh[edit]

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Nako and the monastery
Nako and the monastery
  • ... that the Nako Monastery (pictured) in Nako has sculptures of five Dhyani Buddhas made of clay in the main hall where there are also many thangkas on the walls?

5x expanded by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 04:32, 4 October 2015 (UTC).

  • @Dr.K.: Thanks for the review. I have corrected the text in respect of paraphrasing and what is left is the title of the book under bibliography (3.8%) and not related to the main text. Thangkas are mentioned in web sources realted to tourism so I mentioned it instead of "other idols". However, I am correcting the original hook as per the book reference as ALT2 ... that the Nako Monastery (pictured) in Nako has sculptures of five Dhyani Buddhas made of clay in the main hall where there are also many images?Nvvchar. 06:18, 5 October 2015 (UTC)
  • ALT2 ... the Nako Monastery (pictured) in Nako has sculptures of five Dhyani Buddhas made of clay in the main hall where there are also many images?
  • ALT1 and ALT2 approved. Good to go. Non-clickable refs accepted AGF. Thank you Nvvchar for the cleanup and for writing a very nice article. I took the liberty of repeating the line for ALT2 to make it more visible. Δρ.Κ. λόγοςπράξις 17:14, 5 October 2015 (UTC)
The hooks are not written correctly.
  • ALT1 "more than 500 years old prayer wheel" → should be "more than 500-year-old prayer wheel"
  • ALT2 "sculptures of five Dhyani Buddhas made of clay in the main hall" - sounds like they were made in the main hall. Perhaps it should be "clay sculptures of five Dhyani Buddhas in the main hall"
— Maile (talk) 15:27, 10 November 2015 (UTC)
  • Thanks Maile66 The hooks ALT1 and ALT2 are reformatted taking note of the above suggestions.

ALT1... that the Nako (pictured) has a more than 500-year-old prayer wheel made of yak skin in the Chango gompa?

Alt2a... that the Nako Monastery (pictured) in Nako has sculptures of five Dhyani Buddhas made of clay in the main hall where there are also many images?Nvvchar. 02:03, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

@Nvvchar: It seems you misunderstood what I was saying about ALT2. Sorry if I was unclear about that. The problem with that hook is the order in which the words are arranged. By saying "made of clay in the main hall" it reads that the statues were actually made in the main hall. What the source says is "It's main hall, the Iha-khang, has images of the five Dhyani Buddas carved from clay". May I suggest this:
ALT2b ...that the Nako Monastery (pictured) in Nako has clay sculptures of five Dhyani Buddhas in the main hall where there are also many thangkas on the walls?
— Maile (talk) 16:33, 11 November 2015 (UTC)
  • Agreed with the revised hook ALT2b, Thanks Maile66.Nvvchar. 16:47, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

Striking everything above that might otherwise confuse a promoter. The only changes to the hook were grammar, so the original green tick should be good. — Maile (talk) 23:54, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

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