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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 12:24, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

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Alfred de Laage de Meux

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De Meux, ca. 1915–1917
De Meux, ca. 1915–1917

Created by Tails Wx (talk). Self-nominated at 15:36, 2 February 2024 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Alfred de Laage de Meux; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.

QPQ: No - ?
Overall: @Tails Wx: The article was moved to main space on 2 February (same day as nomination). It has a readable prose size of 2628 characters. Each claim in the article has a reference. WP:EARWIG shows no copyright violations. QPQ has been done. The image looks good and follows the license requirements.

For ALT0: the source says: ... were the only French pilots. The formulation seems to imply that there were other pilots as well. So the text would need to be adjusted.

For ALT1: the first part is supported by the source. I'm not sure what the clause in which he was only the few to do so tries to say. Would it make sense to remove that clause?

For ALT2: I found a passage in the source that says that he didn't attend flying school. That doesn't automatically mean that he taught himself. Do you have a quote from the source that confirms this or should the hook be reformulated?

Some comments on the article

  • to an artistocratic French military replace "artistocratic" with "aristocratic"
  • De Meux is located fourth from left add "the" before "left"
  • transferred to aviation, serving as a air gunner replace "a" with "an"
  • entering combat in the Battle of Verdun thereafter add "and" before "entering"
  • De Meux then met Georges Thenault, commander of the Lafayette Escadrille, in which there seems to be something wrong about the "in which"
  • The word "serving" is repeated a little too often. I would suggest reformulations to make it less repetitive. Phlsph7 (talk) 14:56, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
    Hiya Phlsph7, thanks for taking up this review! For ALT0, yes, I've gone ahead and adjusted it. For ALT1, it'd make sense to remove it. For ALT2, I do have a quote from the second source that states "He served first as a gunner, but in his spare time, somehow taught himself to fly"! I've also addressed your comments here. Thanks! :) ~ Tails Wx (🐾, me!) 16:20, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
    Thanks for implementing the changes. Modifying ALT1 as suggested, we would get:
    Approving ALT0, ALT1b, and ALT2. Phlsph7 (talk) 17:42, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
    @Tails Wx: Sorry, I wasn't aware that backlog mode is active. Since you have over 20 nominations, you need to provide a second review. Phlsph7 (talk) 08:14, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
    Phlsph7 the backlog mode does not apply retrospectively. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 12:23, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
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