Talk:Tropical Storm Colin (2016)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 20:25, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]


  • was the earliest third named storm in the Atlantic basin on record. The third named storm of the 2016 season - remove second usage of "third named storm". Perhaps "The first storm after the official start of the 2016 season, Colin developed..." That makes it slightly more interesting, and puts the first two storms more into context.
  • "Initially a tropical depression, the system strengthened while moving northward and was tropical storm about eight hours later." - bit wordy, when you could say "Moving northward, the depression strengthened into a tropical storm about eight hours after formation."
  • "Strong wind shear would prevent further strengthening, and result in the system maintaining a disheveled appearance on satellite imagery." - why the shift in tense? Previous sentences were regular past tense.
  • " at the same intensity." - does this refer to the peak intensity? Because the last time you mentioned wind speeds was three sentences prior. You could say "still at peak intensity."
  • " Governor of Florida " --> "Florida governor"
  • Can I say "My future office" instead? or "(an office later held by George Cooper)"? :P --12george1 (talk) 15:47, 8 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Being named on June 5" - you said that in the previous sentence
  • "Around 12:00 UTC on June 7, Colin attained its peak intensity with maximum sustained winds of 50 mph (85 km/h)" - at the beginning of the paragraph, you said the storm made landfall with winds of 50 mph, so it reached peak intensity at that point. Otherwise, it's just maintaining its intensity
  • Want me to separate the maximum sustained wind speed and minimum pressure? I could mention the maximum sustained winds with the landfall?--12george1 (talk) 15:47, 8 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • You should include a bit more of the extratropical history
  • Can you trim down the watches/warnings? We do this a lot as a project, but I don't think the watches/warnings are as important until we get the last change in warnings before landfall. Otherwise, it's minor tweaking (usually), and it's not as interesting saying when they were canceled.
  • Anything from the Yucatan?
  • Florida's many paragraphs are a bit disorganized. I'd love to see a meteorological paragraph (mention the peak rainfall!), as articles usually have. Also, there are some trivial impacts in Florida that could be more gleaned over:
    • In Hardee County, a tree knocked over power lines, which subsequently struck a house and started a fire.
    • The storm also downed electrical lines, causing about 9,500 power outages between Tampa and Temple Terrace. - you already mentioned the power outages in the first sentence. Merge this there
    • A mobile home parked in Clearwater was flooded - we rarely give details on individual houses
      • It was actually a mobile home park, not a mobile home parked--12george1 (talk) 01:01, 11 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Merge the sentences on road closures
  • Combine the Tampa/Orlando airport information
  • Could you combine the sentences on tree impacts, and just include what you think is the most important information? It gets a little trivial
  • Any nationwide damage total?
  • I spent some time looking through Google and NewsBank. I didn't see a national total--12george1 (talk) 01:01, 11 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

All in all a decent article, but the impacts need some work. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:25, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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