Talk:Statue of George H. Perkins

Statue of George H. Perkins has been listed as one of the Art and architecture good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: June 29, 2021. (Reviewed version).

Military history: Memorials / European / French / North America / United States / American Civil War

This article is within the scope of the Military history WikiProject. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the project and see a list of open tasks. To use this banner, please see the full instructions.Military historyWikipedia:WikiProject Military historyTemplate:WikiProject Military historymilitary history articles

Associated task forces:
/
	Military memorials and cemeteries task force
	European military history task force
	French military history task force
	North American military history task force
	United States military history task force
	American Civil War task force

Sculpture

This article is within the scope of WikiProject Sculpture, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of Sculpture on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.SculptureWikipedia:WikiProject SculptureTemplate:WikiProject Sculpturesculpture articles

United States: New Hampshire Low‑importance

	United States portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject United States, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of topics relating to the United States of America on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the ongoing discussions. Template Usage Articles Requested! Become a Member Project Talk Alerts United StatesWikipedia:WikiProject United StatesTemplate:WikiProject United StatesUnited States articles
Low	This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale.
	New Hampshire portal This article is supported by WikiProject New Hampshire (assessed as Mid-importance).

Visual arts: Public art

	Visual arts portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject Visual arts, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of visual arts on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Visual artsWikipedia:WikiProject Visual artsTemplate:WikiProject Visual artsvisual arts articles
	This article is supported by the public art task force.

GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Statue of George H. Perkins/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 10:31, 9 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I will review, comments to follow over next few days. Zawed (talk) 10:31, 9 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments as follows:

Infobox

The dimensions given here are for the statue but the materials are also for the structure. Not sure if the template will allow it but perhaps add the dimensions for the structure as well.
- Edited the materials in the infobox to specify whether it applies to the statue or surrounding structure.
  - Hi, this is looking good, but did you look into adding the dimensions of the structure to the infobox? Zawed (talk) 10:13, 17 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

It seems that the statue is the basis of a public memorial but this isn't really reflected in the first sentence. How about: "The statue of George H. Perkins is a public memorial that stands on the grounds of the New Hampshire State House in Concord, New Hampshire, United States."
- Done.

Background and creation

Suggest breaking the paragraph at the sentence following mention of Perkin's death.
- Done.
on behalf of the state, a statue of her father. suggest "a statue of her father as the basis for a public memorial." If going with this, you will need to move the link on memorial to the proposed mention. This change reinforces the point being made in my comment above for the lead.
- Done.

Dedication

The mention of "commander" should be capitalised as it is a rank being used as part of a title. It would be lower case if not being used as a title, i.e. Captain Jones, Jones was a captain.
- Done.
As above for rear admiral
- Done.

Replica

a replica of this statue suggest "a replica of Perkin's statue"
- Done.

Design

link keystone, bas-relief, Doric? All unusual terms
- Done.
On either side of the niche ~~structure~~ are a depictions of an eagle
- Done.
The final paragraph of this section deals with its location. The reference to the "Capitol" is confusing as earlier it is stated the status is in the grounds of the New Hampshire State House. Some context is needed.
- Done, changed Capitol to State House.
It is mentioned that the wall of the building was extended to obscure the plaque. I struggled to understand this until I looked at the picture, and then it was clear. This makes me think that perhaps the caption of the image could mention this as well. I suggest moving the image down a little so it is closer to mention of the Capitol building.
- Moved image down and changed caption to mention the enlargement and how the rear of the memorial is obscured.

See also

The 1902 in art link probably isn't useful to the average reader, too broad a topic.
- Removed 1902 in art from see also section.

Bibiliography

For Alden and Holzer, I don't it necessary to mention the "via Google Books" since the URL takes the reader there anyway. Similarly, the official proceedings and the internet archive.
- Removed via sections from references.

Other stuff

One dupe link: bronze
- Fixed.
Image tag for the building image check out OK. The one for the statue may need a PD-art-type tag for the statue, the existing one I think only covers the photograph.

That's it for me. Will check back in a few days. Zawed (talk) 10:57, 10 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

JJonahJackalope, just a ping as I'm not sure if you have seen this. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:33, 14 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Zawed, thanks for starting this review, I think I've addressed all the points you made and if there are any other comments or concerns you have, please feel free to reach out. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 13:45, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

JJonahJackalope, just checking you have seen my comment above RE the infobox? Zawed (talk) 03:13, 27 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Zawed, sorry about the delay here, but I edited the infobox to reflect the dimensions of the overall memorial structure. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 13:00, 28 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All good. I am passing this as GA as I consider that it meets the relevant criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:35, 29 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]