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Shipyard Railway has been listed as one of the Engineering and technology good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: December 6, 2022. (Reviewed version).

A fact from Shipyard Railway appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 29 December 2022 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that management of the Richmond Shipyards "went out of its way to propagandize against" the Shipyard Railway that was built to serve it?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2022/December. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/Shipyard Railway.

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Need to verify catenary on bridge during WW2[edit]

I'm not certain that the catenary over the bridge was actually dismantled during WW2. This needs to be verified. Tmangray (talk) 01:07, 16 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Shipyard Railway/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Marshelec (talk · contribs) 23:00, 5 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I plan to commence a review of this article. Marshelec (talk) 23:00, 5 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Prose[edit]

The prose is to a high standard. I offer the following suggestions for further improvement:

The lead[edit]

In the lead, add "(an urban mass-transit company)" after Key System in the second sentence. When I first read the sentence, I initially guessed wrongly that the Key System might be some kind of technology. While the reader can click the link to learn about the Key System, I suggest that this small addition to the text in the lead is worthwhile.
- Done Rephrased.
Relocate the sentence in the lead beginning: "The line operated with ..." to be the 3rd sentence in the paragraph, for better flow.
- Done

Route[edit]

In the Route section, readers may not be familiar with the use of "jogged" in the second paragraph to describe a change in direction of a route. I recommend some alternative, perhaps: "turned left for two blocks...", or "turned west ...."
- Done
change "curved trestle" to "curved trestle bridge" and add wikilink to Trestle bridge, removing the same link from "trestle" in the History section.
- Done
Also in the second paragraph, I accept that "grade crossing" is common terminology in North America. However, there is an article Level crossing, and I recommend this term is used instead.
- Not done Per WP:ENGVAR
In the third paragraph under Route, replace "jogged" with "turned".
- Done

History[edit]

Under History, in the third sentence, replace "ran" with "run".
- Done
In the 4th sentence, provide the full expansion of IER, by relocation from the 2nd paragraph.
- Done

Rolling stock[edit]

In the second paragraph, change "refit" to "refitted"
- Done
In the second paragraph, change "married pairs" to "twin units (also known as married pairs)"
- Not done Per ENGVAR

I will aim to cover other GA review criteria in the next couple of days. Marshelec (talk) 00:03, 6 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Verifiable with no original research[edit]

No issues found with references that I was able to check. Online citations are from reliable sources.
No copyright violations identified.

Broad in its coverage[edit]

Good coverage of the topic.

Neutral[edit]

No issues.

Stable[edit]

No issues.

Illustrated[edit]

Images are all relevant, with suitable captions and are tagged with copyright status

This is a Pass. Marshelec (talk) 03:31, 6 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know nomination[edit]

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 11:51, 22 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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... that the Shipyard Railway was "half a century out of date the day it opened"? Source: Duke, Donald (2000). Electric Railways Around San Francisco Bay: Volume Two. Golden West Books. pp. 147–151.
- ALT1: ... that management of the Richmond Shipyards "went out of its way to propagandize against" the Shipyard Railway that was built to serve it? Source: Report on Key System, Oakland, California
- ALT2: ... that disused railway turntables were used as bridge decks for the Shipyard Railway? Source: Shipyard Railway Monument to Ingenuity of Key Engineers (second page)
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Davlos

Improved to Good Article status by Pi.1415926535 (talk). Self-nominated at 05:40, 6 December 2022 (UTC).[reply]

Reviewing... Onegreatjoke (talk) 14:36, 6 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: @Pi.1415926535: Good article. Article is sourced, hook is interesting, and the QPQ is done. Onegreatjoke (talk) 18:56, 6 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]