Talk:Rockstar Games Presents Table Tennis/GA1

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Reviewer: AdrianGamer (talk · contribs) 08:09, 20 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Look forward reviewing it. Expect the full review by Friday. AdrianGamer (talk) 08:09, 20 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • The game is a realistic simulation of the sport table tennis, with the main objective to make the opposing player fail to hit the ball. - This phrase is a bit unclear and confusing. The player means your opponent I assume, but it might also make some readers to think that the game is a multiplayer-only game.
  • Players can compete against the game's artificial intelligence or an offline partner - Does "offline partner" mean local multiplayer? If it is, isn't represented clearly. And if it isn't, it sounds redundant.
  • Like the sport of table tennis, the goal of the game is to make the opponent fail to return the ball. - The phrase "Like the sport of table tennis" is not really necessary. It is a concept that everyone understands and that you have already called the game as a "realistic simulation of the sport of table tennis".
  • Players can select from a roster of eleven characters, which are unlocked as they progress through the game - Do these characters have different abilities?
  • "a variety of players" sounds really weird. It sounds like that players are of different types or something
  • I don't really think that the screenshot of the Xbox 360 is necessary. It doesn't really show anything.
  • particularly early in a console generation, citing Midnight Club: Street Racing and Smuggler's Run (both 2000) - I generally think the brackets should be avoided. But that's up to you.
  • the engine was later used for other projects such as Grand Theft Auto IV (2008), Midnight Club: Los Angeles (2008), Red Dead Redemption (2010), Max Payne 3 (2012) and Grand Theft Auto V (2013) - Citing the years of them is honestly not really necessary. The titles listed are too much, you may remove some of it.
  • Eurogamer's Tom Bramwell praised the game's simplicity, writing that it "doesn't matter". - What does that mean?
  • while the latter praised the game's performance - This phrase is a bit meaningless, and that it does not really add any content.
  • Any sales figures for the game?
  • Consider to replace the current template used in File:Rockstar Table Tennis Game Cover.jpg with Template:Non-free use rationale video game cover. It is also a Wii cover as well. You may want to add that Category:Wii game covers as well.
  • The gameplay section seems to be relying on the the Manual of the game. Try to replace (some of) them with secondary sources
  • Wikilink Gamer Network for Source 10 and 23
  • Ziff Davis should not be italicized for Source 11
  • No dead link. Impressive work.
  • No copyright violation

Overall[edit]

Here is the review
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  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:

A great article, almost an easy pass, but the excessive use of the manual could be a problem. AdrianGamer (talk) 13:29, 22 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, AdrianGamer! I've gone through and fixed most of your concerns. I just wanted to let you know that I haven't been able to find any sales figures for the game, despite looking for quite some time.
If there are any outstanding concerns, please don't hesitate to let me know. Thanks! -- Rhain1999 (talk to me) 09:46, 23 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I still think that that Xbox 360 image is not necessary. AdrianGamer (talk) 09:51, 23 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Personally, I like having the image there; I got the idea from the Infamous Second Son article. However, I will remove it if you insist. -- Rhain1999 (talk to me) 09:52, 23 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Well, it looks nice, but I don't think that the image actually add any useful information to the article. AdrianGamer (talk) 09:55, 23 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I think it does, to an extent, but it's not very vital in the understanding of the topic, so I'll remove it. -- Rhain1999 (talk to me) 09:57, 23 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Article looks great now. Rockstar Games Presents Table Tennis was promoted to . Congratulations! AdrianGamer (talk) 10:12, 23 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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