Talk:Redrum (Era Istrefi song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sebbirrrr (talk · contribs) 20:55, 17 May 2022 (UTC)

Hi there! I'll be taking this article for review. I'll leave comments soon.

Infobox

• Add alt text for the cover

Lead

• "English-language" seems unnecessary
• "focusing on the concept materialism" → "focusing on the concept of materialism"
• "Istrefi's appeareance" → what does appearance refer to here?

Removed. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:42, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

• "the song attained success" → "attained success" seems unnecessary since the song only charted on three charts
• "topping the charts in Albania" → "peaked at number one in Albania"
• "reaching the top 50 in the Commonwealth of Independent States (CIS) and the United States" → "reached the top 30 in the Commonwealth of Independent States (CIS) and the top 50 on Billboard's Dance/Electronic Songs"

Background and composition

• Link BonBon and add its release year in brackets
• "premiered for digital download and streaming" → "was released for digital download and streaming"
• "It was written by Istrefi, David Singer and William Vanderhayden, while produced by Felix Snow and Mark Ralph." → "Istrefi wrote it with David Singer and William Vanderhayden, while Felix Snow and Mark Ralph produced it."
• "she knows the relationship has many deficits" → "she knows the relationship is deficient"
• Add a period after the last lyric

Reception

• "Upon its release" → remove "its"
• "of V Magazine" → "of V" and link V to V (American magazine)
• "As of Beautiful Buzzz's" → "According to Beautiful Buzzz's"
• Ref 8 says "killer aesthetic" instead of "murderous aesthetic"
• Where does Ref 9 compliment Istrefi's fashion?

I may have got mixed up, removed. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:42, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

• "similarly complimented the singer's fashion" → "expressed a similar opinion regarding the singer's fashion"
• "on the last issue of the country's Top 100 chart for the week ending on 12 March 2017" → this reads awkward, I'm confused by what "last issue" is supposed to mean

Music video

• "was hired for the shooting, for which Millicent Hailes was credited as the director" → "was hired for the shooting of the video, while Millicent Hailes directed it"
• Barbera and Krask's roles don't seem worth mentioning
• "in a smoky-surrounding and red-colored setting" → "in a red-color setting surrounded by smoke"
• "Generally viewed positively by reviewers," → "The video was received positively by reviewers."
• "V Magazine's Truman Ports" → change to "Ports" since you already mentioned the publication the author is writing for and their full name
• "Currinn from Critic Jonni" → same thing as above

Track listing

• Everything is alright here

Credits and personnel

• Everything is alright here

Charts

• Everything is alright here

Release history

• Add a couple more Apple Music links for "Various" as you've only added one, which is from Kosovo

References

• Copyvio score at 29.6%, most of it being the song's lyrics but it's still good
• For ref 3, add how users can view the credits as they are not visible from first sight
• For ref 4, replace "V magazine" with just "V" and link it to V (American magazine)
• What makes ref 7 reliable?

The website seem to be quite allowable and uptodate, there also few sources which review the song. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:50, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

Outcome

•  On hold for 7 days until all issues are fixed! Sebbirrrr (talk) 22:43, 17 May 2022 (UTC)

Hey @Sebbirrrr:, I've adressed your comments and thank you a lot for the review. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:50, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

@Iaof2017: You're welcome. Everything is alright now so I'm  passing