Talk:Over There (Fringe)/GA1
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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk) 20:44, 30 March 2011 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this article. I'll give it a read through now and add any queries or points below. If theres anything simple to fix I'll do it myself, but if I inadvertently change the meaning of something without realising it, then please feel free to revert it. Miyagawa (talk) 20:44, 30 March 2011 (UTC)
- Plot: "Walter (John Noble) and Olivia (Anna Torv) discover that Peter (Joshua Jackson) has agreed to go back with his real father, "Walternate" (Noble), back to his own dimension." - any chance of rewording to prevent the repeat of "back"?
- "Olivia goes to the typewriter communication station to await orders and is revealed to be Fauxlivia infiltrating our side." - I would say that it would be better worded to say that she was revealed to be Fauxlivia by going to the typewriter communication station.
- Production: "a little bit more playful... When [Anna] first showed up on set in this different guise, she had really embodied this other character in a very playful and sexy way. She turned a lot of heads". - MOS requires that the relevant citation needs to immediately follow the quote.
- "like such a doofus holding a gun," - same again.
- "faced a bit of hatred" - and again. I'll stop listing them as theres a couple more and just ask that you check the rest of the article for quotes and add direct citations. You just need to add them to the end of the sentence that the quote is in - in some places its a sentence or two later.
Other than that, I have no further issues. It's mainly just the referencing for the quotes. Good job. Miyagawa (talk) 21:29, 30 March 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I have edited the article per your suggestions. Please let me know if there is anything else the article might need. Thanks, Ruby2010 talk 21:49, 30 March 2011 (UTC)