Talk:Neil Etheridge/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:31, 28 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments as I'm accustomed to seeing, no major issues at all with GA criteria, so please take the following as you see fit:

Avoid single-sentence paras, e.g. opening the lead and closing the lead in such a manner is a little jarring.
Would also reduce it down to three paras.
I usually just add "association" with football, to ensure we get no complaints from those outside the only real code...
" making over 90 appearances " -> more than 90.
Chelsea youth team in the infobox and Club career section is piped to a redirect.
"He took up the sport of football " no need for "the sport of"
" in Fleet, Hampshire where " comma after Hampshire.
Caution over those small paras again as we go into the Fulham section.
"underwent surgery on both knees." any precursor to this?
"2009–10 season " I usually put season inside the piped link.
" extension in May that would extend " extension ... extend, repetitive.
"in which was his and Rovers first clean sheet of" not sure you need the "in" here. And wouldn't it be "Rovers'"?
"end of 2013–14 season" you didn't link that particular season.
" with the Saddlers" I think this is just unnecessarily confusing for non-football readers. Just remove.
"nominated for the August Player of the Month." this probably needs a link or some context, again for non-experts.
"his countries matches" shouldn't that be "his country's matches"?
"single goal-enabling" definitely shouldn't be a hyphen, maybe a comma?
"kept the scoreline respectable " a little too colloquial for my taste.
" 3rd place" third place.
"In his home nation, the Philippines, " after the previous section about his international career, I don't think "his home nation" is really needed here.
Some spaced hyphens in the ref titles (should be en-dashes).

That's all I have. I'll put it on hold while we get through these, but as I noted, it's pretty much there, these are the icing on a decent cake. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:08, 28 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks very much for the review, I've amended all of the points above bar one. In regards to adding association before football, I have no real strong feelings either way but the WP:Football MoS would go against that and, more than likely, I don't think it'll last long before someone removes it. I'm happy to add if you feel it's an important addition, let me know your thoughts. Kosack (talk) 20:59, 28 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Kosack, happy with those changes, so I'm passing. Good work. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:35, 29 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]