Talk:Melania Trump/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Thebiguglyalien (talk · contribs) 07:52, 9 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 02:08, 1 April 2024 (UTC)

• Hi Thebiguglyalien, I’ll review this article :)).  750h+ | Talk  02:08, 1 April 2024 (UTC)

Prose

• ”Melania Trump (born Melanija Knavs;[a] April 26, 1970) is a Slovenian-American former model who served as the first lady of the United States from 2017 to 2021 as the wife of President Donald Trump.” That sentence might be a bit too long. Maybe “Melania Trump (born Melanija Knavs;[a] April 26, 1970) is a Slovenian-American former model who is the wife of President Donald Trump. As such, she was the first lady of the United States, serving from 2017 to 2021.”
• ”She changed the spelling of her name to Melania Knauss” For conciseness, consider changing to “She changed her name to Melania Knauss”
• ”They began dating, and she began adjusting to a more lavish lifestyle.” Maybe change to “They began dating, and she adopted a more lavish lifestyle.”
• ”In the month leading up to the election, she was forced to respond to the Access Hollywood tape that had caused a scandal for her husband.” remove had
• ”Her father Viktor Knavs first worked as a chauffeur, and he eventually sold car parts for a state-owned vehicle manufacturer as he made connections with the communist party.” Maybe changed to “Her father, Viktor Knavs, worked initially as a chauffeur before he began selling car parts for a state-owned vehicle manufacturer as he made connections with the communist party.” Might just be my personal preference though.
• ”Her mother Amalija worked as a patternmaker at the children's clothing manufacturer Jutranjka in Sevnica.” Add Amalija‘s last name.
• ”At the time, she had wanted to be a fashion designer rather than a model.” Remove had.

Referencing

• I have done a spotcheck on 3 sources [3], [150], and [175]. Just a minor concern is reference 2, from the “Dolenjski list”, a reliable source?

Final comments

• No more concerns. Address the above comments and I’ll be happy to pass the article! :)  750h+ | Talk  02:28, 1 April 2024 (UTC)
  • 750h+ I appreciate your taking the time to look over the article. However, I disagree that most of these are issues. This review only covers the first few paragraphs, and it does not address the GA criteria. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 22:13, 1 April 2024 (UTC)

    I couldn’t find many issues. I can do a double scan if you want..  750h+ | Talk  00:00, 2 April 2024 (UTC)

750h+ Given the scope and contentious nature of this article, it would probably be better if it were looked at by someone with a lot of experience nominating and reviewing at GAN. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 00:57, 3 April 2024 (UTC)

Okay, a second opinion has been added.  750h+ | Talk  00:59, 3 April 2024 (UTC)