Talk:Mark Oliphant/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gilderien (talk · contribs) 11:34, 9 June 2013 (UTC)

Initial thoughts

• Why is "The two men got along very well, dining at Trader Vic's in Oakland" releveant? Was it a regular or frequent occurence? Please clarify.
  • It establishes the personal relationship between the two, which becomes important later on. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
• " Lady Elizabeth Cockcroft who had died the year before" - the way this is written, it implies that they may have been more children, which there were not.
  • I don't follow this. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
    • Omitting the comma from " alongside Timothy Cockcroft, the infant son of Sir John and Lady Elizabeth Cockcroft, who had died the year before." implies that there were more children than the one who died.--Gilderien Chat|List of good deeds 18:25, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
      • I added the comma; is it okay now? Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:32, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
        • Yep, all good. --Gilderien Chat|List of good deeds 19:53, 13 June 2013 (UTC)
• "the klyston capable of generating 400W" - do you mean klystron?
  • Yes. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:39, 13 June 2013 (UTC)
• " large-scale railgun which was used as a scientific instrument.experiments with plasma physics" - do you mean "instrument in experiments" or has some text been accidentally deleted?
  • Yes. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:39, 13 June 2013 (UTC)

--Gilderien Chat|List of good deeds 22:01, 11 June 2013 (UTC)

No copyvio found. GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality: Yes -

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

1. Pass or Fail:

--Gilderien Chat|List of good deeds 20:12, 14 June 2013 (UTC)