Talk:Jegichagi

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Wow wow wow!

Awesome. Excellent job here! I really love the page. To be honest, I think it's a great idea to do something about your culture. You guys not only just do the assignment but also introduce to me a traditional Korean game. And I think this is kind of cool!

In terms of formatting, the page is really organizing and easy to understand.There isn't much for me to say. I love the part: How to make Jegi. It is really detailed and easy to follow. I even try to make one for myself. It's even better if you can include pictures of step by step.

Once gain, Congratulation. I will vote for your wiki version if we have a contest in class

Baokhang (Baokhang) April 2010 (UTC)

Hey guys, This page is pretty detailed. Excellent job! It looks you guys did well research on the topic and the page shows it. There isn't much to critique you on. I like how everything is neat and categorized. Makes it easier to view. The boxes on how to make the Jegi is a nice touch because it easy to find if I was scrolling down really fast and wanted to find that part especially. I don't really have any problems with this page. If you wanted, you can include pictures of the step by step ways of making the Jegis, if pictures are available. That would be pretty neat. But the page is complete and looks fine the way it is. Great Job!!!

Myap89 (talk) 23:30, 7 April 2010 (UTC)

Hey,

After reading your page I have most certainly learned a lot more about Korean games. I think your page definitely has many strengths. As mentioned above, the section entitled "How to make Jegi" is very simple and helpful. It also makes the game make more sense. The historical background is also a great way to put the game into perspective for people who have never heard of it. The organization of the page has been done well and I think you guys have a pretty solid product here.

Some concerns I have deal with some of the grammer and writing styles used, in the first paragraph especially. This is where the page's authenticity really defined. Check out some of the subject verb agreement in this paragraph. I feel like when I was reading it some of the sentences seemed to run-on and/or become slightly confusing. These are easy to fix issues, but they need to be done to make the page look more "official".

Overall, I think the idea, presentation, and organization of the page is great. This topic is perfect for wikipedia because it provides insight to a game that most americans have no idea about. Excellent work. Jherion (talk) 16:07, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

Overall, the page looks really great! I couldn't help but draw similarities between this traditional game and that of Hackey Sack as they have a lot in common.

I did notice a couple of small grammatical errors while reading so be sure to comb through the paragraphs carefully to get all of those, as they can trip up the reader. Also, in the how to make a Jegi section, it seems as if the formatting on your boxes is off. The numbered lists extend outside of the boxed zone. I'm not sure how exactly to fix this, but I would look into it.

Great Job guys!Joellane (talk) 18:02, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

You're got a huge amount of information here - you definitely don't need to add more details. I'm impressed, and agree with the compliments above. I have a few suggestions:

- work on the style of writing throughout to make it more similar to the writing in other articles. You've structured the article well, but at times you lose the reader by getting into narrative and including things that can't easily be verified as fact (e.g., you write, "The origin of Jegichagi is that people had their own play or game in the past. When they got bored, they might have used small rocks, a piece of wood, or even animal's excrement as jegi.") Think about citing as much as possible, because even if you don't need all the references, it will force to think about appropriate info for a Wikipedia article.

- I'm not sure how best to deal with all the game instructions - it's fascinating to learn, but you need to careful about What Wikipedia is not - in this case, you shouldn't be trying to write a manual for the game on this page. You're in the wonderful position of probably having too much info for this topic and type of page, so you can edit away and still have an impressive article.
- Categories - you need to place this article effectively within Wikipedia, and that means finding appropriate categories in which to include it. Category:Korean_culture would be a good start. - One concern I had - obviously you are transliterating into English, so there may be issues about effectively linking this to other references to "Jegichagi" already on Wikipedia when others have already written about it but used different spellings. Is this (Jianza) the same game? If they are very similar, might it be worth combining the articles... if not, no worries! Laichena (talk) 19:15, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

Hey guys, This article is very complete—great job! You thought to include everything—even the health benefits of playing the game! My critiques are just specific nit-picks. First, I really liked the picture up top, and I think it belongs there because, right away, it shows that this is a fun topic, even before the reader has had a chance to read anything. One suggestion I have, though, is to move the picture of the jegi closer to the top. You might not want to clutter the top of the page with pictures, but I spent a lot of time reading the article and wondering what a jegi looks like. Also, I have some technical critiques with the linking. The word “otgoreum” looks as if it was meant to be in-linked, but then it doesn’t go anywhere. I do agree that it needs to be explained somehow, even if you can’t do it with a link. Maybe just including what it is right in the text will fix the problem. Also, I noticed the word “shuttlecock” under “Basic Rule” was linked to a Wikipedia page. But the word first appears in the history section, so this is where the link should probably go. That way, if someone is coming across the word for the first time, they can figure out what it is. As for the content, I just wanted to know why the game started out as a game mostly played in winter (if this information is available). Another thing you might want to include is a sentence or two about what other games this can be compared to. It sounds similar to the game “hacky-sack,” and I was wondering if hacky-sack was derived from jegichagi. I really liked how you were able to describe the game in both broad and specific ways. The top of the article is broad enough for someone who wants just a little bit of information on the game, and the bottom has detailed steps for a person who is really interested in learning the game. Good job guys! Lmontini (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 19:42, 8 April 2010 (UTC).

Hey, This page is very well done, history, rules, how to, explanations... Very informative. You definitely covered all information aspects, and don't need any improvements there. Some editing of gramatical use, and language could use fixing, but other than that great work! I would definitely play jegi, and I think it's a great choice to create a page about because of the lack of exposure it has in the United States. Good job. ```` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jpetracc (talk • contribs) 00:49, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

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