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Named the references so they would only cited once at the end. I also added the link to the course here on the talk page. Swaugaman (talk) 19:05, 21 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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I think your article is very strong thus far, and is an informative and interesting topic. However, one section I would be interested in seeing pertains to the areas in which there is no intervention for female child marriages. A multi-layered description of the provinces or states with these issues would be very illuminating in order to highlight which regions are failing. Additionally, I think there is more to be said in regards to Islam or related groups and their influence (even though you have a redirect to "Women in Egypt.") Examples of where this would be particularly interesting include marriage and education. In other words, are there clashes between women and the above noted groups that disturb marriage and educational goals? Another somewhat intertwined topic that may be useful to examine could include why family planning is so limited. While the proceeding sections are well documented, I think you can again tie Islam or related cultural norms into why sexual harassment/violence is prevalent. I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors or typos.CodyG123 (talk) 00:40, 22 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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I agree with a lot of what Cody has written. I think you could also expand many of these sections, in addition to speaking about the different cultural groups' expectations of women. Specifically, under health, it would be interesting to see some other general health statistics along with life expectancy- for example, a comparison of men and women's rates of heart disease, cancer, etc. Something I think you need to watch out for is the comparison aspect of women. The title of your article, gender inequality, would suggest that there is an inherent comparison to be made between the genders. In many sections of your article, you only talk about the way women experience things, without showing how this affects inequality. In some cases, this is for obvious reasons- for instance, it would not make sense to talk about men's reproductive health! However, in other sections (employment or education, for instance), I think the comparison between men and women would add a lot to your article. The article is very well-written- if there were any grammatical errors, I didn't notice them. However, you may want to rethink some of the wording in the CEDAW section- some of it is a bit awkward. Otherwise excellent article. NogaArdon (talk) 04:03, 22 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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You are developing the article nicely; you've added the Political participation section; expanded the education and employment sections. In the remaining few days before the finalize your contribution I suggest adding more material on economic inequalities between women and men (by locating a few key articles): jobs, poverty. Also revise the reference to "perfect" score of 1 in the second opening paragraph: score of 1 means perfect (complete) inequality! I agree on adding information on gender inequality, expanding beyond women's status, where ever possible. Just keep the gender lens on!BerikG (talk) 06:18, 25 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]