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Are you sure JackBoys should be listed as an artist in the infobox, or should the label only be mentioned in prose like "Clique"?
Travis Scott should be before Pop Smoke for correct order, plus remove the comma directly prior to and
"American rappers Pop Smoke and Travis Scott, the latter of who is" → "rappers Travis Scott and Pop Smoke, the former of whom is" plus mention it being from the compilation album at the end of this sentence and add release year in brackets since an exact one for a release on the album is not notable for the lead. Also, is it really correct to stay "is a song by" then the label's name when it is not a performer?
Just realized JackBoys is not a record label. I'm also keeping that Pop Smoke and Travis Scott are Americans.
"the song's production while Axl" → "the song's production, while Axl"
"Travis Scott raps about his former girlfriend Kylie Jenner and." → "it sees Travis Scott rap about Kylie Jenner and."
Not done Jenner was Travis Scott's girlfriend at the time. All the sources talk about him rapping about why they broke up.
Shoot for the Stars The introduction to her as his former girlfriend being solely in the body is sufficient, especially since it says here that he raps about them breaking up. --K. Peake 07:45, 25 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Move the critical reception sentence to being the last one of the first para
"It reached the" → "It also reached the"
"around the streets in New York" → "around New York's streets"
"Bugatti Chiron, with Pop Smoke sitting in" → "Bugatti Chiron while Pop Smoke is sat in" to be less repetitive with the body, with the wikilink
"the use of the Bugatti Chiron in the video." → "its usage of the Bugatti Chiron."
"Travic Scott released JackBoys'" → "Travis Scott released JackBoys"
The pre-order is not sourced
Only the song titles leaking is sourced in the December 26 sentence, plus pipe Shazam to Shazam (application)
"the help of American rapper" → "the help of fellow rapper"
Left that he is American
Shoot for the Stars You should use "fellow rapper" instead because Travis Scott is an American rapper, so Pop Smoke being one too is clear from the usage of the term "fellow". --K. Peake 07:45, 25 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"to be on the track "Gatti"." → "to be on "Gatti"."
The writing/production info should be before the release date of the album
"from Scott and the label's compilation album, JackBoys," → "on Travis Scott and the label's compilation albumJackBoys" with the wikilink
Add a sentence after the JackBoys release date about the song's inclusion as a Target bonus track on Meet the Woo 2, especially since you are working on this article for the GT
"Peter Klapka. 808Melo handled the song's production while" → "Peter Klapka, while 808Melo handled its production and" to be less wordy
""fiery tandem bring [Pop Smoke and Travis Scott into a] frenetic energy"." → "the "fiery tandem" of Pop Smoke and Travis Scott "bring their frenetic energy into the streets of New York"." per the source
Not done Jenner was Travis Scott's girlfriend at the time. All the sources talk about him rapping about why they broke up.
On hold until all of the issues are fixed; hopefully the GT comes to fruition! --K. Peake 09:48, 24 May 2021 (UTC)