Talk:Doctor Who season 2/GA1

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 15:25, 25 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]


Happy to review the article.

Review comments[edit]

Lead section / infobox[edit]

  • Link DVD.

Serials[edit]

  • Link or convert inch.
  • Link insecticide; meteorite; Roman villa; galley; time machine (Time travel).
  • Consider linking Black Dalek (Dalek_variants#Mark_2_Daleks).
  • Doctor locks the TARDIS doors and bids Susan an emotional farewell - ‘Doctor locks the TARDIS doors to shut Susan out, before bidding her an emotional farewell’ is more accurate imo.
  • A minor point, but I think ‘transmitted’ sounds better (and more accurate) than radioed.

Casting and characters[edit]

  • £10 and £25 – there needs to be some indication of what this is worth in modern currency. I would recommend using {{GBPConvert|10|year=1964|convert=no|r=-1|showdate=no}} which gives ‘£10 (equivalent to £190 in 2019)’.
  • the final appearance of Russell and Hill as Ian Chesterton and Barbara Wright, respectively – the actors have the same role throughout the article, and so ‘the final appearance of Russell and Hill’ will surely do here.

Writing[edit]

  • Link both King Richard and (his sister) Joan.
  • I’m not sure about the statue as depictions of Nero and Richard I. See https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Nero_pushkin.jpg and https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Richard_Leon.jpg for what I consider to be better images to use.
  • the Doctor and his companions shrinking in size - is duplicated information from the previous section.
  • effective work on The Keys of Marinus – how was it effective?
  • I would avoid a "stew pot", as it is idiomatic (see MOS:IDIOM).
  • incorporate it - ‘incorporate comedy’?
  • I would simplify The Daleks and its sequel The Dalek Invasion of Earth to something like ‘the first two Dalek stories’.
  • scrapped for unknown reasons – this needs amending, as presumably the reasons were known to both parties at the time.
  • Regardless – of what?

Promotion[edit]

Books[edit]

  • Should all the serials be linked again here? The links lead neither to articles or information about the novelizations.

On hold[edit]

Not much to comment on, considering the large size of the article I'm putting it on hold for a week until 5 February to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 16:12, 28 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Amitchell125: Thanks for the review! I've made some changes per your suggestions. Please let me know if there's anything else! – Rhain ☔ (he/him) 12:08, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Passing[edit]

All sorted except for the comment about the Books section, which I think can be safely ignored. Passing now, congratulations on producing a fine article. Amitchell125 (talk) 13:16, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

To be clear, the serials in the Books section link directly to the relevant novelisations. Thanks for the review! – Rhain ☔ (he/him) 14:35, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Understood, many thanks. Amitchell125 (talk) 19:10, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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