Talk:Andreas Joseph Hofmann

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A fact from Andreas Joseph Hofmann appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 23 January 2007. The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that Andreas Joseph Hofmann proclaimed the first republican state in Germany on March 18, 1793?

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in Reply[edit]

hey Kusma, you are doing a great Job on this Article. I would love to help, and have already tried, but I am afraid I cannot read German so the references are no help to me, looks like it is all down to you.

I placed the Wikify tag too early, now I have seen this article develop I can see it is not another one of those dead end articles. Yungur 11:35, 17 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 06:54, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Thank you for taking this on! I'll start fixing / addressing your points tonight. —Kusma (t·c) 12:55, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

~~After looking at your other featured content, I'm struck by the lack of an infobox. What's the reasoning for not having one here this time?~~
I like to use infoboxes when I have (a) a picture and (b) more structured content for them, for example for officeholders where there are predecessors and successors etc. In Hofmann's case, what really makes him notable is his presidency of the first democratic parliament in Germany, but we don't have an article about that office, either. But I can try a simple short and fairly bare-bones bio infobox and you can tell me whether you think it is an improvement. —Kusma (t·c) 21:28, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Works for me! –♠Vami _IV†♠ 12:36, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Prose[edit]

~~Hofmann was born in Zell am Main near Würzburg as son of a surgeon. The son of a surgeon?~~
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~~and was soon after employed by the Count of Hohenzollern-Hechingen.[3][4] Do any of your sources identify which Count employed Hofmann?~~
None of the sources explicitly name the Count. The ruler at the time in question was Josef Friedrich Wilhelm, Prince of Hohenzollern-Hechingen. For these small counties, it is difficult to tell whether he was working personally for the Count or generally for the county; if we don't name the count personally, it stays a bit more ambiguous (and closer to the sources).

And it was not a count, but a prince. Not careful enough while translating into English, I'll fix this. From Otto's article: "[...] und musste froh sein zunächst eine Stelle als Hofrat im Dienste des Fürsten von Hohenzollern-Hechingen zu finden." Do you think we should name the prince, as it is clear who it is?
If you have a source that names that prince, which you seem not to. You could try slipping him in with a link to said prince at "the Prince". –♠Vami _IV†♠ 12:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I've checked a couple of sources and they all just say he worked for the prince of H-H without a name (but it was just a short time, so there's not much to be said about that anyway). I've piped Prince to Josef Friedrich Wilhelm, which seems like a reasonable compromise to me. —Kusma (t·c) 13:42, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Sweet. Time to pass, then. –♠Vami _IV†♠ 13:56, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
~~Like many other future Jacobins in Mainz, Could you move the wikilink to "Mainz" here? Alternatively, could you use this to make an inter-language link if applicable?~~
Added illink to Jacobin club of Mainz, and also linked both Mainz and University of Mainz earlier on in the section.
~~as a member of the Corps législatif Remove the ILL here.~~
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~~and there is no known picture. Add "of him".~~
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