Talk:15th Anti-Aircraft Brigade (United Kingdom)

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:03, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "1941—7 March" needs to be spaced en-dash.
• "January 1947–31 December" likewise.
• "Anti-Aircraft command" why capital A in Aircraft?
• "those AA units based" I would say "those anti-aircraft (AA) units based...."
• Is there a link for "batteries".
• "Bofors 40 mm guns" link?
• "train the AA Section" why capital S for Section?
• Phoney War seems to capitalise War.
• What's HAA?
• "slopes of the Rock, causing" link Rock?
• "coming North African Campaign, the" campaign not capitalised.
• " on the rock" capital R? Consistency, at least.
• "20mm Oerlikon" link?
• "20 HAA gus" typo?
• "at 240 mph" convert.
• "wrote to the War Office asking" overlinked.
• "and Bofors 40 mm guns together" overlinked.
• "was War Office policy" overlinked.
• "Decrease in Hostilities" hostilities.
• Link Medway.
• "rise of Surface-to-air missiles and 'blind fire' radar control" no need to capitalise Surface. What is "blind fire radar control"?
• "placed in suspended animation" why not just "suspended" rather than this verbose detail?
• Ref 18 should be spaced en-dash.
• And ref 20.
• Ref 22 should be pp.
• "forces 1660-1978 : biographical" en-dash.

That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:48, 20 September 2021 (UTC)

Changes added and fixed J-Man11 (talk) 18:52, 26 September 2021 (UTC)

• "1941—7 March" needs to be spaced en-dash.
• "January 1947–31 December" likewise.
• "Anti-Aircraft command" why capital A in Aircraft?
• "those AA units based" I would say "those anti-aircraft (AA) units based...."
• Is there a link for "batteries".
• "Bofors 40 mm guns" link?
• "train the AA Section" why capital S for Section?
• Phoney War seems to capitalise War.
• What's HAA?
• "slopes of the Rock, causing" link Rock?
• "coming North African Campaign, the" campaign not capitalised.
• " on the rock" capital R? Consistency, at least.
• "20mm Oerlikon" link?
• "20 HAA gus" typo?
• "at 240 mph" convert.
• "wrote to the War Office asking" overlinked.
• "and Bofors 40 mm guns together" overlinked.
• "was War Office policy" overlinked.
• "Decrease in Hostilities" hostilities.
• Link Medway.
• "rise of Surface-to-air missiles and 'blind fire' radar control" no need to capitalise Surface. What is "blind fire radar control"?
• "placed in suspended animation" why not just "suspended" rather than this verbose detail?
• Ref 18 should be spaced en-dash.
• And ref 20.
• Ref 22 should be pp.
• "forces 1660-1978 : biographical" en-dash.

All completed J-Man11 (talk) 12:55, 27 September 2021 (UTC)