Wikipedia:Peer review/List of California hurricanes/archive1

California hurricanes

I think that this is pretty close to featured list status, but I need some suggestions on how to improve it further. I also hope that this isn't the first time people become aware that tropical cyclones hit California.

I assure you that I will keep on top of updates regarding Otis. Miss Madeline | Talk to Madeline 22:07, 1 October 2005 (UTC)

• needs a picture at the top of the page, next to TOC
• the list is not very encyclopedic, maybe have a few sections of prose discussing the most important ones and why they were important (level of damage caused, unusual features etc). the list itself should possibly be down, below the preparedness section (or moved to another page).
• tropical cyclone preparedness section is grammatically poorly written. also "it would be pruduent": is there a plan or isnt there?
• "See Also" should be "See also"
• See also articles should begin with capital letter
• Notes should be one line per note
• "External Links" should be "External links"

My updates.

• I am looking for a picture. I was once looking at a photo or Nora's remnants over the US, but I can't remember where I saw it. If anyone knows where it is, please tell me or put it in the article.
• I added a few more sentences to some of the list entries. I don't understand what you mean by the list being unencyclopedic. Please clarify. I intend for this article to be a featured list.
• I added more info on coordination on different agencies regarding possible effects of Nora and Linda.
• Done
• Done
• Someone else put the notes on one line each
• Done

Miss Madeline | Talk to Madeline 22:05, 2 October 2005 (UTC)

Niz 22:35, 1 October 2005 (UTC)

I echo what Niz said, in addition:

1. the lead is too short (WP:LEAD)
2. Paragraphs too short (every single one of them, pretty much)

Take care! Ryan Norton ^{T | @ | C} 04:37, 2 October 2005 (UTC)

• I expanded the lead section.
• I don't understand your problem with short paragraphs. Please clarify. I intend for this article to be a featured list.

Miss Madeline | Talk to Madeline 22:05, 2 October 2005 (UTC)

Thanks - I'm unfamiliar with featured lists, but at any rate the paragraph thing shouldn't be too tough to do once it becomes a featured list candidate :). Ryan Norton ^{T | @ | C} 14:28, 5 October 2005 (UTC)