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Brian Horrocks[edit]

This article has just been promoted to GA, and has recently been peer reviewed here. I think it may now be close to, or at, the A-class standard. Leithp 06:39, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support This article is well written and well referenced. The use of pictures and maps is also great. --Nick Dowling (talk) 08:14, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment - Nice piece and the content is fine but the prose copy could be crispy/tighter and less wordy/expansive, for which I suggest a vigorous prune. (Easiest and best is to get someone else to do it for you. Tom Welsh, if he's free, is good at this.) Anyhow, a few examples taken from the Early life & First World War section (incidentally "&" > "and": MoS reserves ampersands for established corporate titles.)
  • Like many sons of officers, he received his education in a public school in Britain. I'm not sure this adds anything at all.
  • He was an unpromising student and might not have received a commission ... Perhaps this paragraph could do with a re-order, perhaps chronologically. ie Educated at Uppingham, applied for Sandhurst, unpromising student and sixth from the bottom. Scraped in thanks to WWI. Do you have the date of his commissioning handy?
  • After being given command of a platoon > "In command of a platoon"?
  • Do we need to wikilink "bottle"?
  • For FAC, you'll need to replace hyphens (-) with en-dashes (–) in the number ranges (ie pp 34-35 > pp 34–35); add full stops at the end of all the refs, and add a hard space ( ) between the pp and number range in refs.
--ROGER DAVIES talk 12:04, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment All my trawling of the London Gazette didn't turn up his original commissioning, and the ODNB doesn't give the precise date either - it merely says "on the outbreak of war". David Underdown (talk) 13:35, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • flash of inspiration leading to a search on "gentleman cadets" finally tracked down the date of his initial commissioning, 8 August 1914. David Underdown (talk) 14:06, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment I think David and I have addressed your comments, with the exception of the proof-reading. Unfortunately the user you mentioned is on a break and hasn't made any edits recently. I had considered sending it to the League of Copyeditors, but their backlog is extremely large. Is there another user who might be willing to proof read? With regard to the "hard spaces", are they applicable only to "pp." references or should I be using them on "p." references? Leithp 15:57, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • SoLando is good but may be busy with exams. Otherwise, try the Logistics dept/copy-editing. I reckon it's probably a day's work. If you get stuck, I might be able to do it myself but probably can't start until next week.
  • Yes, "p." as well as "pp". It applies to letter/number combinations (10 kg, Vol. 2 etc). --ROGER DAVIES talk 03:28, 9 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not just studies, but a distinctly annoying cold. SoLando (Talk) 16:26, 9 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Addendum: I've enough time; whether my revisions, in conjunction with other editors, prove to be satisfactory is another matter entirely. Roger, "good"? Good!? I'm grrrrreat! :-D SoLando (Talk) 17:32, 9 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, then, dude ... AWESOME --ROGER DAVIES talk 10:23, 10 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Tut, tut. Ahem ;-). SoLando (Talk) 13:27, 10 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support. Excellent and interesting article. Very nice work. Cla68 (talk) 01:29, 9 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment. No objections EXCEPT for a major ref-tag problem on ref # 24 (at least I think it was 24). it's jumbled up the entire footnotes section. That needs some quick fixing. I suspect it's just a glitch or something. Cheers! Cam (Chat) 01:28, 10 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support.If possible, Horrocks' civilian ventures, especially his career in television, would benefit from more exposition. SoLando (Talk) 13:27, 10 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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