Wikipedia:Peer review/Sunderland/archive2

Sunderland[edit]

Needs seriously pumping up in a few ways for the CD version of wikipedia, I need major help on this, and I can't have this peer review ignored. Alphablast 17:12, 26 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Nomination came from now blocked sockpuppet of User:Molag Bal. Martinp23 19:39, 27 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Some points to consider:

Typically the history section comes first, followed by the geography section.
This has a large table of contents.
Add footnotes to sources for "On average, it is around 80 metres above sea level." and "The University of Sunderland...currently has over 16,000 students."
I would merge the "Civic history" sub-section into the "History" section.
Remove external links from the body of the article, like "See the full list of victims", just use footnotes.
A map of those wards in the "Demographics" section would make it a lot easier to understand.
Add information on what services the local government provides, (ie. drinking water, sewage, hospital, police, etc?)
The area that could use the most improvement is getting rid of one-sentence paragraphs, there are currently two of these in the lead section, and several throughout the article. --maclean 19:48, 26 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]