Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Mxmtoon/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 8 January 2023 [1].

Mxmtoon[edit]

Nominator(s): Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 03:58, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a young pop musician who, though in still being light of age and thus not having accrued that many achievements in life compared to older artists, has nevertheless done enough--and amassed a dedicated-enough fanbase--to deserve an FA! If I wrote it that well... Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 03:58, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'm sorry to have to do this, but at the moment I'm going to oppose on numerous grounds and suggest you withdraw this.

A very quick readthrough shows the following examples—although this is by no means a comprehensive list:

Lead is too short
Too many stubby one-line paragraphs
Formatting error of the quote ("— mxmtoon, [19]"), as well as the quote just appearing out of context
Some formatting errors ("Prom Dress," is an example that it repeated)
Some of the grammar is a bit lumpy ("followed by EP Dawn in April; accompanying EP Dusk was released") is an example
No examination of musical style
Footnote c is uncited
Weak sources (Amazon shouldn't be in there, for example).

I suggest you withdraw this nomination (there is no shame in that for a first attempt), have a look at some similar FAs to see the level of information needed and do some additional work on it. I'd also suggest going through PR to get further input to the article. – SchroCat (talk) 11:03, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

SchroCat Thank you!! How do I withdraw this, do I take the text out? Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 19:27, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Rebestalic, I'll take care of that as one of the FAC coordinators. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 19:35, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I thought that the article was fine for GA, but I didn't think it would be nominated for FA so fast after that. I would take the advice from SchroCat. It will take quite a bit more work, but the result feels good. SL93 (talk) 17:27, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

SL93 Thank you too!! Rebestalic^{[leave a message....]} 19:27, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been withdrawn, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 19:36, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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