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The article was promoted 21:25, 13 May 2008.

Le Quang Tung[edit]

Commander of the Army of the Republic of Vietnam Special Forces. A bit of an obscure fellow, I've included everything in the books... Blnguyen (bananabucket) 05:54, 29 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Sources look good, no external links to check. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:00, 29 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments: all about prose. Otherwise fine.

  • Early life: the first three sentences, each introduced by a subordinate clause, read strangely. Recast?
  • "As pilgrimages to the pond became larger" Clumsy? "As more people made pilgrimages to the pond"?
  • "Nhu would then use the scare to round up" > "take advantage of the scare"?
  • "They officials mined the pond". They > the? Mined > blew up?
  • Check for EngVar? Criticise and organise (BE) but maneuvred (AE)
--ROGER DAVIES talk 09:58, 5 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed I think. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 02:11, 6 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, --ROGER DAVIES talk 07:28, 6 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved issues from Maralia (talk) 19:18, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments I made a few edits to add missing/drop stray words, fix punctuation, and wikilink some dates. A few prose issues:

  • "Serving a family dictatorship concerned purely with maintaining unadulterated power, Tung's military background" - misplaced modifier
  • The President Ngô Đình Diệm image is impinging on the section header below it; please move it to the right side.
  • It's late, I'm tired, and these coups and counter-coups are confusing, so forgive me my stupidity: who is the blockquote from? Could you make it more clear?
  • "The brothers were made to kneel over two freshly dug holes, shot into them and buried." - This is awkward. How does one shoot somebody into a hole? Something like "Forced to kneel over two freshly dug holes, the brothers were..." would help separate what they were made to do from what was done to them, too.
  • "The body of Diệm in the back of the APC, having been executed on the way to military headquarters" - misplaced modifier; also, what is 'the APC'?
Maralia (talk) 04:48, 7 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support My concerns have been addressed. Thanks for an interesting read (and a quiet hurrah! for an article that does not rely on any online sources). Maralia (talk) 19:18, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support looks good and meets the criteria. Well done. TomStar81 (Talk) 18:05, 12 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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