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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Laser brain via FACBot (talk) 23:11, 18 June 2018 [1].

History of the Nashville Sounds[edit]

Nominator(s): NatureBoyMD (talk) 16:42, 16 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This article is a history of the Nashville Sounds Minor League Baseball team. It was recently split from the team's article, which is a Featured Article, due to its large size. I believe it meets the FA criteria in content, format, and referencing, though it may benefit from additional sets of eyes. NatureBoyMD (talk) 16:42, 16 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • Brief comment: there are at least half-a-dozen paragraphs ending with uncited statements. This should be remedied urgently. Brianboulton (talk) 19:17, 16 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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Comments – Happy to see an article like this appear at FAC. Here's what I found to comment on from the early part of the page:

  • Prior professional baseball in Nashville: "who were charter members the original Southern League from 1885 to 1886...". Needs "of" before "the".
  • Getting a team and building a ballpark: Don't need the Minor League Baseball link here, since there was already one in the previous section.
  • "for a period of 20 years as long he built a stadium with a minimum capacity of 6,500 at a cost of at least $400,000 within 10 years." Needs another "as" after "long", to go with the one before that word.
  • Again, Nashville Vols doesn't need a link here since it has one earlier.
  • Cincinnati Reds (1978–1979): "Much of the sod that been laid that winter died". Need "had" before "been".
  • "In fact, Nashville went on to lead the Southern League in attendance in each of their seven seasons as members of the league." The first two words don't serve much of a purpose in an encyclopedia article. I'd hope this statement was a fact; otherwise it shouldn't be included in the first place.
  • "Add "the" in "At end of two seasons at Double-A...". Better yet, just make it "After two seasons".
  • American Association: No hyphen is needed in "entirely-new franchise".
  • Detroit Tigers (1985–1986): "until Gordon Mackenzie was brought on to lead the club for the rest of year." Needs "the" before "year".

On the positive side, I like the fact that you've blended in information on off-field matters such as attendance data and logo information with the on-field results. I know from experience with a very similar article that it can be hard to merge these disparate elements into a smooth read that is comprehensive for the subject, and you've done a good job of that in the sections that I read. However, my initial impression is that the article needs some copy-editing work. I'm seeing a lot of little glitches, such as missing words, some awkward bits of writing, and a bunch of repeated links. If you and the coordinators can wait a couple of days, I'd like to take a shot at doing some copy-editing/cleanup myself. Giants2008 (Talk) 20:41, 5 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • Thanks for your comments. I've made the suggested corrections, and welcome your forthcoming copyedits. NatureBoyMD (talk) 20:49, 5 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • So I've finished cleaning up some of the writing and it looks better now. My last remaining concern is whether 262 Down Right (references 1, 4, and 8) can be considered a high-quality reliable source. It looks like a blog-type site from what I can tell. I'm not doing a full source review here, but whomever does that review will likely need to be persuaded that this site is reliable enough to be used in an FA. Giants2008 (Talk) 22:25, 15 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thanks. I went ahead and replaced those references with print sources. NatureBoyMD (talk) 22:59, 15 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Coordinator comment: This has been open for more than a month without attracting any support for promotion, so it will be archived shortly. --Laser brain (talk) 23:11, 18 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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