User talk:Takirajohns83/Helen Joseph

Hi Takira, I think your draft for your contribution is fundamental to Helen Joseph's Wikipedia page. Every point that you have added is an essential piece to the article and tells us more about Helen Joseph herself. If I can, I might suggest that you add a definition for the word "anti-apartheid" and explain more about what kinds of rights she was fighting for besides women's rights. But other than that I think your contribution is good.

Macenzie77 (talk) 15:31, 23 April 2020 (UTC)User:Macenzie77Macenzie77 (talk) 15:31, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Takira, I think the things you added are interesting points that were not previously made and are important to the woman's storyline. I think you should include more about the anti-apartheid things she did and the way that the trial and treason section was set up is a little weird other than that I really like the contribution you made LillianPittman (talk) 18:57, 23 April 2020 (UTC)LillianPittman[reply]

Jpate2 ([User talk:Jpate2|talk]]) Hey Takira, I enjoyed your contributions and believe you did a great job. I like how you contributed to previously made statements and improved them. To improve, I would change "Helen Joseph was a product..." to "Helen Joseph was the product..". Also, I would change "Joseph was banned from publicly opposing.." to Joseph was banned for publicly opposing...". Otherwise, great job! (Jpate2 (talk) 19:56, 23 April 2020 (UTC)Jpate2)[reply]

I think you really did a good job with your contribution!! The information that you provided was new and expounded on the original info in the article. The only thing that I saw was that you described her early child household/parents as racist and while that may be true, it could possibly be overstepping wikipedia's "no biased" rule. Kirstenb2 (talk) 02:10, 29 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]