User talk:Shoba98

Lead section[edit]

Hi Shoba, you should add an "A" article before "Particle receiver", so the first sentence will be "A particle receiver is a...". Also, instead of repeating that it is a "receiver", you should explain what a receiver is: the lead section should be easy to understand even for people who are not into the topic. Jaqen (talk) 08:27, 5 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the feedback Shoba98 (talk) 08:41, 5 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaqen Hi Jaqen, I implemented the corrections that you mentioned. Also I think that I am very close to finishing the whole page, please let me know if you have any additional feedback. Thanks! Shoba98 (talk) 13:23, 5 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]