User talk:Historian11233/Mariposa War
FEEDBACK FROM Dr. HYDE:
ou’re getting started here. The parts you plan to add will be important additions to the piece. The key task now is laying in citations that are newer and fuller, which means pulling some new books out of the OU Library, using their indexes to look up the Mariposa war.
1) Lay out the structure of your article or the new chunks of an old article with an Introduction and titles for the parts you want to add or rewrite Laying the earlier history of the Gold Rush and attitudes about Native Americans makes sense. You can link to other Wikipedia articles for some of that. The parts about what actually happened are easier to update, but you can get stuck in too much detail there. 2) Added new, high-quality sources (books, articles, authoritative websites) As you add citations to the paragraphs here, you have to use some of the excellent histories that have been written about this. Start with Ben Madley, American Genocide, 2016 which OU has online and on the shelf. Brendan Lindsay is the other recent book. They have also both written journal articles about the topic. There are a few older books specifically about the Mariposa War and Sheriff Burney – he is the hero in those books - but they are useful if you use them carefully. Eccleston, Robert. The Mariposa Indian War, 1850-1851; Edited by C. Gregory Crampton. Salt Lake City: University of Utah Press, 1957. (OU HAS this and THE INTRO WOULD GIVE YOU DETAILS OF THE WAR) 3)Written 50-60% of what you hope to add A little thin but, I can see where you are going and that parts you hope to fill in. At some point, you might have to decide to focus on two or three sections rather than working on fixing the whole article. You can leave some work other people to do later. 4) Thinking about linking as opposed to creating too much background Here is where you might need to consider how much background people can get from other Wikipedia articles about earlier wars, massacres, and early California History. 5) Started to clean up a few paragraphs You can decide whether you want to do this on the mainspace or in your sandbox, but the clean up and fixing spelling and writing errors takes a while. Another next step is adding some maps and images. GRADE FOR DRAFT (POINTS) : 67/80 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Afh1858 (talk • contribs) 17:06, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
Peer Review 11/10/23[edit]
Overall: this is a really interesting topic and you have a good start updating the information! I left more specific feedback in the peer review sandbox.