User talk:Dhouston04/sandbox

So far so good, it looks like you have researched the disease and need some work organizing or writing up the details. Add more information if you can find it, and it'll turn out great. --OliviaRas92 (talk) 18:11, 12 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This was a great topic to read about, with very good information presented. However, I would like to suggest making / adding some things, such as:

In the section labeled as “Cause”, I would suggest adding a bit more definition / describe what “normal red blood cells” are. Also, define / describe the process of apoptosis.

In the section labeled as “Mechanism and Pathophysiology”, I would suggest defining / describing, what is meant by the word “arrest”. Also, is there a specific stage, during the maturation phase, that this arrest takes place in this condition? If the stage is unknown, I would suggest stating that it is still under investigation. Ysamuel44 (talk) 04:22, 16 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Needs to be heavily linked to other wikipedia articles.
There is a lot that could be explained in the mechanism that is not.
You have a lot of good information, but I think it could use some work on organization and clarity. Remember that this needs to be readable and accessible to lay readers.
Missing prognosis and recent research sections.

--Sweiner02 (talk) 02:38, 4 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

So far great job! However, I can see that your abstract is very limited to pieces of information. I’m a little confused about the signs and symptoms. When you say may or may not maybe you should include into more details like specifically the situations when it’ll occur and the situation when it won’t occur. The diagnosis may include more informations on why the test is done and what they’re looking for. Other than that it looks really good. (Vnguyen09 (talk) 22:56, 8 December 2019 (UTC))[reply]