This is my workshop, where I'll take a look at a few paragraphs for rewording in several paragraphs. There are add comment buttons on this page for you to add comments (who would have guessed?) to the appropriate paragraph areas.
Ok New Plan. I'm going to see if I can revamp the page a little and I'll put into a draft page later.
The article seems to be nearing featured status. There should probably be a few more references; my question is, what else is left to cite? Also, is there anything other improvements to be made to this article to reach featured status? —The Great Llamatalk 00:23, 12 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZt 18:00, 12 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
The characteristics section seems overly long and there are several unfree images that don't seem to be adding to the article. For instance, we don't need to know what a fire flower looks like, especially since the text is describing Mario's powers and abilities. Jay32183 02:52, 15 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I think the characteristics section can be trimmed a bit by removing the discussion on his age. There isn't an official age listed in any source, the entire section is based on speculation. Unsourced speculation is considered a bad thing in Wikipedia articles. Jay32183 20:50, 20 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Would it be at all possible to combine the paragraph about Mario being a doctor in "Occupations and hoobies" with the "Doctor Mario" section? It seems to me that the prose would flow better if the those connected ideas were consolidated.Jay32183 03:54, 22 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
This article was last weeks Improvement drive. What more do people think needs to be done for this article to reach featured article status? I know the enemies section is still a bit messy, I'll try to get round to fixing that up soon. Jacoplane 20:47, 29 July 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Its getting there, good work and keep at it.
I tried to smooth out the intro a bit, and I'm sure my attempt and can improved upon.
" as Mario games specifically lack over-complicated plots or too much character development so as to not limit his future roles." - That's a bit POV - who's to say what's over-complicated?
Biography needs to be longer
Minor grammer issues throughout article
Under abilities and techniques maybe a table or something with pictures for each transform would be good (although maybe a bit wishlist-y)
"Many contend that Mario first appeared in the video game Donkey Kong as Jumpman (Shigeru Miyamoto, his creator, contends that Mario is a descendant of Jumpman and not Jumpman himself)" as opposed to...?
There's a couple one sentence paragraphs in there
and of course what you mentioned about the bestiary. --RN 22:46, 29 July 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for fixing up the intro. And thanks for your feedback. You some insightful comments, they give us a good starting point to improve the article, thx! We'll take your comments into account, we hope to have Mario on the front page soon ;) Jacoplane 22:58, 29 July 2005 (UTC)[reply]
I tried to objectivize the sentence you cite in your second point, in the article's Biography section. I also replaced en-dashes (-) with em-dashes (—) throughout the whole article where applicable. I would appreciate some assistance in adding some information to Mario's biography; I believe it can be said he is somewhat lazy (falling to sleep if inactive in Super Mario Sunshine, if I recall correctly) and gourmand (as his plump appearance seems to indicate), though he livens up if the situation calls for it. Added to that, he cares for the wellbeing of other people (frequently saving the Mushroom Kingdom) and is a sensitive character (love interest with Princess Peach). Do others have suggestions or comments? Thanking you, Grumpy Troll(talk) 17:41, 6 August 2005 (UTC).[reply]
Get rid of the list of characters; takes up too much space, and this information should be condensed to sections/paragraphs on Wario, Luigi, Princess Peach and King Bowser. Same with the moves; like Wario has done, don't do a list, take the most important ones. -- A Link to the Past 15:58, August 9, 2005 (UTC)
I went ahead and rewrote the biography intro sentence to make a little more sense and be a bit less absolutist... it might need some minor tweaking --Ryan NortonT | @ | C 16:27, 9 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Yes I just realised this not too long ago. I've just added the fair use rational in all the images linked to from Wario, (See Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Wario) .. I'm going to do it for this article too. Thanks for the feedback. I find this whole situation a bit unclear though, and I wonder how Super Mario 64 became a featured article when the images found in that article have no fair use rationale.
I didn't realize it until the peer review for Final Fantasy VI.(Which i'm working on right now) Super Mario 64 probally either slipped through the cracks, or the policy was not affect at the time of the creation. I'll work a little bit on that pictures from that article. --ZeWrestlerTalk 19:44, 11 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Mario (マリオ) is a fictional character and the protagonist of Nintendo's Super Mario Series. Created by Shigeru Miyamoto, Super Mario is Nintendo's flagship franchise, as well as the best selling franchise in video game history, having sold over 300 million copies world wide.[1] Mario has appeared in over 150 video games making him the most prolific character in video game history. [2] Outside of video games Mario has appeared in 4 cartoons and the first movie to be based on a video game.[3][4]
