User:Omehrage/Feminism in India/Ju menendez Peer Review
Peer review
[edit]This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.
General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing? Omid (username: Omehrage)
- Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Omehrage/sandbox
Hello Omid, it is unclear where you will be adding this section of writing. After looking at the 'Feminism in India' page, I suggest including it under the sub-heading 'Issues' (which actually mentions Personal Laws, but not so in depth. Maybe reorganize the material in this section and perhaps even add a subheading having to do with religion. Or another suggestion is to incorporate it into the material found under heading 'Religion'.
Lead
[edit]Guiding questions:
- Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
- Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
- Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
- Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
- Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
Lead evaluation
[edit]Lead was not updated.
It is quite thorough and informative.
It mentions "..women living in modern India still face many issues of discrimination." --- which is what your contribution will be elaborating on.
Content
[edit]Guiding questions:
- Is the content added relevant to the topic?
- Is the content added up-to-date?
- Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Content evaluation
[edit]Yes! Relevant and an important addition! Under sub-heading 'Issues', the article does mention personal laws but very briefly. It is important that you reorganize this section so as to appropriately integrate your contributions to the material that is already there.
Your contribution is a little limited. You wrote, "the issue comes into play for women's rights in India whether or not they obtain freedom from their Personal Laws governed by religion or through the constitution of their country." So, ultimately, what governs over women: the laws laid out by Religion or Constitution? You properly laid out the contradiction of rights that exist between these two sphere, but it is important also to note how this plays out in practice. What/who determines what laws (religious or constitution) are followed? Do women follow religious laws in some aspects and constitution laws in others? I think you could go deeper into the reality of this contradiction to continue to provide valuable contributions.
Tone and Balance
[edit]Guiding questions:
- Is the content added neutral?
- Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
- Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
- Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
Tone and balance evaluation
[edit]Good, neutral tone.
You properly mentioned the contradiction of religious and constitutional laws in theory (you even mention the specific Article), whereas there is less focus on what is written in the personal laws.
As previously suggested, you could also add more info on how this affects women in practice. You've properly mentioned the contradiction of religious and constitutional laws in theory, but how does this affect women in reality?
Sources and References
[edit]Guiding questions:
- Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
- Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
- Are the sources current?
- Check a few links. Do they work?
Sources and references evaluation
[edit]Missing sources! This is very important! (!!) Cite where you get all your info.
Organization
[edit]Guiding questions:
- Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
- Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
- Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
Organization evaluation
[edit]Yes, well written and clear!
Just find a way to properly integrate it into the existing article. Be careful to not repeat what has already been said.
Images and Media
[edit]Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media
- Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
- Are images well-captioned?
- Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
- Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?
Images and media evaluation
[edit]N/A
For New Articles Only
[edit]If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
- Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
- How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
- Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
- Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
New Article Evaluation
[edit]N/A
Overall impressions
[edit]Guiding questions:
- Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
- What are the strengths of the content added?
- How can the content added be improved?
Overall evaluation
[edit]Very good start! I think you could flesh it out a little more though--mainly by (1) adding more specifics on Personal Laws, and (2) adding how this contradiction works out in practice (beyond the theory of what's written in the laws) and how this is directly affecting women. Also work on integrating it properly into the rest of the article. As I suggest, maybe reorganizing the content under 'Issues,' and perhaps even adding a sub-heading there. Good job Omid :)