User:Elrupp/Causes of sexual violence/Samthebossbabe Peer Review

From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

Lead in the article is detailed with theories of causes of sexual violence, notes there are inconsistencies in studies. From a sociology perspective, I would add what the article will entail. One sentence summaries of each section pointing out the main argument of each section, would help the reader understand the main points before reading on.

At the beginning of each section change "these rapists" to the type of raper (for example anger rapists, power assertive rapists, sadistic rapists, etc).

Section on Anger Rape - my suggestion is to swap the first and second paragraph. The first paragraph defines Anger Rape, and the second paragraph gives more of the why. In my opinion this gives the reader more context on what it is before explaining why. Follow this structure throughout the article.

Article overall has great structure, and minor sentence restructuring.

General info[edit]

Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)

Link to draft you're reviewing
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]

(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)