User:Ekidd04/Islamic mythology/Stevenn117 Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Ekidd04
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Ekidd04/Islamic mythology - Wikipedia
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Islamic mythology - Wikipedia
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit](Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)
Lead:
[edit]The added sentence in the lead by my peer adds more context to the overall Islamic mythology, which is good because it avoids confusion. I wonder if adding a link to the text "Islamic Law" would be more helpful for readers. I feel like the lead has a concise paragraph
Content:
[edit]For "Types of Islamic Mythology", instead of "Sub Heading 1", it should be "Heading". However, I like the added part of the Types of Islamic Mythology as part of the first headings because it gives more context, while expanding more on mythology. Also, I would put links to Cosmogony and Eschatology, which can be helpful for readers. Overall, I feel that this section belongs, is relevant, and adds more to the article in a concise manner.
I have noticed that in the active article, there was some "clarification needed" marks. In the sandbox draft, my peer has added in text for more clarification in multiple sections, which is a nice and needed touch.
Tone and Balance:
[edit]Overall, the article has a neutral tone to it. I did notice that a lot of the word "God" has been replaced by "Allah" in this draft. I wonder if this is a necessary change, since God and Allah are interchangeable, and if they could cause some inconsistency throughout the article. The article does not have any bias or persuasive text.
Sources and References:
[edit]The sources are correctly referenced, and the links do work. The sources are peer-reviewed material. It seems that the sources are relevant to the article's content.
Organization:
[edit]The text is easy to read, concise, and have little grammar mistakes. I found one grammatical error:
"While in Islam there is no single story of creation, it is made clear the Allah is the one who created the world."
Grammatically, it should be "...that Allah", not "the Allah".
Overall, the sections are clear, and the renaming of the sections are more relevant. It is well-organized.