Template:Did you know nominations/Javed Manzil

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:27, 18 August 2014 (UTC)

Javed Manzil[edit]

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... that the residence and death place of Mohammad Iqbal was renovated and converted into a museum by the Pakistani government in 1984?

ALT1:... that out of all the residences of Mohammad Iqbal in Lahore, only the Javed Manzil actually belonged to him?

Created by Faizan (talk). Self nominated at 16:13, 26 July 2014 (UTC).

Age & length okay. Both hooks okay, the latter based on a restricted-access source accepted in good faith. However, the article seriously needs some copyediting for context, as currently Iqbal isn't even properly introduced. QPQ requirement waived, as nominator has 4 DYK credits, but will be required next time. --Paul_012 (talk) 19:09, 11 August 2014 (UTC)

Doing... Fai zan 13:53, 14 August 2014 (UTC)

I have applied some fixes here. I think that mention as "National poet" is enough for Iqbal's introduction, and not much is needed here. I am not involved in copy-editing, however, please specify the problems, if anymore. Fai zan 16:09, 14 August 2014 (UTC)

Okay. The language could still be improved, but it should be good enough for DYK, IMO. --Paul_012 (talk) 09:24, 15 August 2014 (UTC)